Pain
So your mom, she's a mess
head ta toe in bruises
'Cause your dad, he comes to now and then
And you brother gets high
Damn near all the time
So you cut, hoping all this will end
And if you say, if you tell
Flames will rise up from hell
Burning what's left to debris
If you stay you'll keep sinkin'
Suicide, always thinkin'
Take a chance, take a chance with me
And
C'mon outta the pain
Leave behind the insane
Take my hand, let's run, run away
Ya, you have an escape
I can show you the way
To burst into life once again
And help lead your family
away
from all the pain
Sulkin' within demise
Now your hospitalized
Life slowly seeps from the gashes
Your life's on the line
No one visits this time
They're drownin' in their own ashes
If you wake, if you rise
Future compremises
Are yours to lead the way
It's right here can't you see?
Just quit lookin' through me!
Listen to all I say
And
C'mon outta the pain
2007-10-03 23:07:55 · 10 answers · asked by ? 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Leave behind the insane
Take my hand, let's run, run away
Ya, you have an escape
I can show you the way
To burst into life once again
And lead your family
away
from all the pain
2007-10-03 23:08:14 · update #1
I love it, normally as you know I prefer the poem's that I read to have perfect pitch and flow, but I think the the fragments within your writing here really lend to the emotion blocked within the lines of this prose, I also really like the divine right you use to strip the lines bare to emotion, leaving the reader wrothe with pain and guilt, you make the reader think and thats the best accomplishment one can do when writing, well done, keep up the fantastic work!
2007-10-03 23:53:57 · answer #1 · answered by kissaled 5 · 2⤊ 0⤋
The Pain is caused because you let him in
Why did you let him in?
Were you in need of love?
Now all he wants is your blood
How can you live without blood?
or Is he your blood?
He's not
Let him go
In life there's more to show
Than a villian, that's taking your life
You don't have to be the sacrifice
Live for your family
they're worth more
More than this monster
Taking you to hells door
You won't be judged just let him go
He causes you nothing but hurt and harm
Get out of the pain
Someone Sound the Alarm
To wake this fool up
Hey, this fool was once me
They had to drag me
But he almost bagged me
Not giving him the satisfaction
I chose to end the pain!
2007-10-04 13:58:14 · answer #2 · answered by dada555 2 · 3⤊ 0⤋
oH SHAD!
What could possibly be so bad?
Suicide is never the answer.
Dont take the easy way out and leave others behind to grieve you! Things will get better. If its as bad as it can be you could almost be sure theyll be a brighter tomorow! Whats wrong?
On the poem. Wow talk about emotion. I just hope you werent reffering to yourself. This poem had great detail it was absolutely amazing! Keep Writting!
2007-10-05 00:35:40 · answer #3 · answered by Sh00ting_St@r! 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I see an assault in this poem
because someone got beaten
and she is in pain with bruises.
Brother are getting high
and not helping her
I have to wonder if the father beat
his wife senselessly.
Suicide is often done so the person
who did the crime wont have to
go to jail or prison.
Come on get healed
I know it will take time.
2007-10-04 10:51:11 · answer #4 · answered by sweet_blue 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Pain is beautiful when it gives you a thought
That you care and not numb at all
Pain is beautiful when it tells you
How much alive you are...
End pain and be senseless
be senseless and be worthless
its better to feel pain
than to end life,
feel pain less,
and regret being worthless
2007-10-04 07:18:16 · answer #5 · answered by marxon 1 · 4⤊ 0⤋
There was a time in my life that I would have thought this was written for me. Yet again a beautiful heartfelt masterpiece.
Thank you for sharing with us on y/a.
2007-10-05 09:18:15 · answer #6 · answered by loretta 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Needles and pins, needles and pins
When a man's married then troubles begin.
good luck
2007-10-04 06:43:57 · answer #7 · answered by ari-pup 7 · 5⤊ 0⤋
What can I say?? Another masterpiece.
Where do you get your energy???
2007-10-06 10:14:22 · answer #8 · answered by Captain Mozar 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
wen u write ur book could i get a copy with ur autograph????????plzzzzzzzz
2007-10-06 06:04:20 · answer #9 · answered by aditi 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Awesome
what more could be said?
2007-10-04 06:16:11 · answer #10 · answered by Dondi 7 · 6⤊ 0⤋