I wrote a song and I wanna know what you think (I know it's mean, but I don't care...)
After what you’ve told me
You thought I was gonna crash and break down
But you don’t know me
I never stop fighting for my dreams
I can and will be mean just so I can reach a goal
But one thing is for sure
I won’t accept a no as an answer
Chorus:
I will never stop fighting for what I want
And I will get it one way or another
Not giving up
Not giving up
That’s just the way I am
That’s just the way I am
And I don’t care if I have to crush some hearts to get there
Not giving up
Not giving up
That’s just the way I am
That’s just the way I am
I know that what I’m doing ain’t right
But don’t even tell me to forget it and move on
No plan B
You have no choice but doing what I want you to do
I don’t care if it makes you sad
I don’t care if it makes you mad
But I’ll get there
The final answer is my decision
‘cause the war will not be over
Until I saw so
Chorus
True Friend
True Friend
That’s not what you are to me
You’re more like a shy girl
Who does what I want you to do
It feels good
Oh yea it does
To be mean sometimes
And it’s perfectly fine
If I reach my goal
No No No No
That’s not gonna be the final answer
‘cause I know I can change ur mind complety
And I will
Chorus
2007-10-03 12:17:51 · 17 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
Sorry, I mean "until I say so"
2007-10-03 12:18:09 · update #1
That's good. You have potential as a song writer.
2007-10-03 12:20:47 · answer #1 · answered by sweetbeesma 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It seems like two songs at once. You didn't stay on the same subjects. The chorus and verse don't flow together correctly.
In this chorus:
I will never stop fighting for what I want
And I will get it one way or another
Not giving up
Not giving up
That’s just the way I am
That’s just the way I am
!And I don’t care if I have to crush some hearts to get there!
Not giving up
Not giving up
That’s just the way I am
That’s just the way I am
The line with exclamations points doesn't fit because it is too long.
2007-10-03 19:24:29 · answer #2 · answered by ~JennyBunny~ 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
WELL... I don't really like it, honestly. It would be great for a pop song geared towards 12 or 13 year olds. However, you should strive to write lyrics that have meaning, passion, and soul. This doesn't (just like almost everything else that's been released the past few years!). It's too literal. Try invoking lots of elaborate metaphors so people have to read between the lines. This allows your listener to interpret your songs the way they'd like and apply your lyrics to their own situations and really FEEL what you're saying. It'd a difficult feeling to describe, but some of us know that it's possible to feel an awesome song pulsing through your veins while you're listening to it. You want your lyrics to be cloaked in mystery so that only those who truly empathize with you can understand your meaning.
2007-10-03 19:25:43 · answer #3 · answered by justme 4 · 1⤊ 1⤋
I think it is really good! I am trying to write songs right now and it is not easy so good for you. It must have taken a while (or maybe not, some people are really good at cranking out song lyrics). I like it but the only thing is shouldn't the chorus be similar? They seem pretty different. Maybe I am wrong, it is just something to look at. Good job and I hope I helped!
2007-10-03 19:47:35 · answer #4 · answered by bcmariet 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think you got something going on there..if i may add when i listen to songs i don't like the words being repeated more tan 2x it kinda bores me but i like your lyrics good luck
2007-10-03 19:22:11 · answer #5 · answered by robin r 6 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Wow, you are wayyy more talented than me! Even though it was mean, it still speaks the truth. You should go into the songwriting business!
2007-10-03 19:22:36 · answer #6 · answered by Haley 3 · 2⤊ 0⤋
i'm a little confused!
is it a song or a statement?
i bet you you created the lyrics first, i can imagine how it sounds like already!
well, times change!
2007-10-04 04:00:27 · answer #7 · answered by kudos 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'm impressed. Now get Kelly Clarkson to sing it for you and enjoy the fruits of your labor (money).
2007-10-03 19:25:13 · answer #8 · answered by Max 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
You're really talented. I don't think it's mean. In other words, the song is great.
2007-10-03 19:59:12 · answer #9 · answered by A I ™ 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It sounds really good to me. Keep writing songs!
2007-10-03 19:27:06 · answer #10 · answered by ʎʇɐʞ 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋