This is the last sentence in my conclusion paragraph for a paper on the american dream and the great gatsby. All i need to know is if it sounds good/bad/horrible. Basically i just need to know if it makes sense. If not please leave suggestions. Here it is.
It may seem impossible to achieve the American dream, and for most people it will be, but for those who live their life to it’s fullest, their dreams may be closer then they could imagine.
2007-10-02 15:43:08 · 9 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
A few errors... the 'and' is not nessecary, those is plural so live should be lives, and it's means 'it is' (which, if put in place, would not make sense) so change it to its....and the last section sounds bad...try this (sounds much better imo):
While it may seem impossible for some to achieve the American Dream, those who live their lives to the fullest may one day realize that thier dreams are closer than they could have imagined.
2007-10-02 15:58:28 · answer #1 · answered by Patrick 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It may seem impossible to achieve the American dream, and for most people it will be. But for those who live life to its fullest their dreams may be closer than they could imagine.
2007-10-02 22:58:47 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Butterfly's analysis of the sentence is good. But, actually, I disagree with your thesis. The American dream (at least as I understand it) is very achievable, and a large portion of our population achieves it.
2007-10-02 23:03:59 · answer #3 · answered by Terri J 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Dont listen to the guy with the Hat
It sounds like something i would have
copied for an essay
That means that it sounds great
Hope you get a good grade
2007-10-02 22:52:47 · answer #4 · answered by / 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's good. If that's an example of your paper, you're good. Did you discuss and expand on you ideas? I'm an English teacher, but, really, no one cares about the fluidity of your last sentence. It's the whole paper.
2007-10-02 22:53:57 · answer #5 · answered by Brian B 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
your conclusion is not bad ( good!!!) but try to avoid using " it seems" or in my opinion.
2007-10-02 22:51:22 · answer #6 · answered by Dead or Alive 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
sounds like bs.
2007-10-02 22:46:25 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It sounds great!!
GREAT!!
2007-10-02 22:47:15 · answer #8 · answered by mathlover 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
"It's" is incorrect, is should be "its" (neutral possession)
2007-10-02 23:26:14 · answer #9 · answered by Experto Credo 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋