This is one I wrote a couple of weeks ago. I'd like to know what y'all think.
The Chess Game
A small, off-white piece moves first,
Advancing on the dark black army,
Hinting at a bigger plan.
The black army moves,
Responding to the sly movements
Of the creamy other player.
Within a few moves,
The obstacles have been removed,
Leaving the heart of the game exposed.
Black takes advantage, moving in,
Wounding the rest of my white army.
I protect the king with all I have left,
But it’s too late—I’ve given you my white king.
Your move.
2007-10-02 12:06:02 · 4 answers · asked by Amelia 6 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
im sorry but i dont like it all that much
sorry
2007-10-02 12:16:31 · answer #1 · answered by :P 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it. The images are clear and there's a nice musical rhythm to it. Keep working on your poetry. I believe you have definite talent in this area - and the world needs more poets.
2007-10-02 19:10:24 · answer #2 · answered by Richard B 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i love the idea and lay out of it but i might say you should try to give it a minor rhyme scheme. poems sound so much better that way. keep going! =)
2007-10-02 19:10:37 · answer #3 · answered by Why Fear the Dark? 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love it! REAL good!
2007-10-02 19:15:55 · answer #4 · answered by La Mer Bleue 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋