Life.
We think we know what it's all about,
Living our lives and playing about,
Really we havn't been here that long,
And some of us don't see it's a place where we all belong,
The world is full of high expectations,
Wasting time on needless relations,
Well they are wrong, all wrong because,
When you live your life its yours,
no need to focus it on flaws,
Because when the sun light shines,
And the church bell chimes,
Its yours,
It's Your life.
The world isn't perfect as it seems,
Full of war and shattered dreams,
The rivers flood and the seas shed blood,
And the birds, fly, fly away,
Going on to annother day,
Is is really right to stay?
In this world this wrong, wrong world should we stay?
So don't listen when they say,
Because you live your life your way,
You live what you want, and have your own theme,
And don't let anyone spoil your dream,
Spoil your dream,
Your dream, of life.
its not very good looking at it, but what do you think?
2007-10-01 09:46:05 · 18 answers · asked by ωєℓѕн 4 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
WOW! That was truly awesome! You are on your way towards becoming rich and famous...believe me you will go far! Will you then remember this girl who gave you a Star???
2007-10-01 10:00:50 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 3⤊ 0⤋
you are able to superb be your actual evil self in front of better half and infants. once you're a daughter, then you definitely are Mum has seen the worst, once you're a son, then you definitely're Dad has seen the worst. There are issues you tell your mothers and fathers that they can't proportion, and subsequently Mums love sons and Dads love daughters. If Dads knew what Mums knew (and any opposite direction around) the international might implode(explode) because of the fact of this. And because of the fact of this it continuously would be
2016-10-05 22:20:27 · answer #2 · answered by cris 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's also not very bad.
I liked it. If it can be set to a tune you have something that meets your mom's challenge and could be turned into a nice song.
You have a little promise in this poetry writing game. Keep on trying.
2007-10-01 17:38:44 · answer #3 · answered by Warren D 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like the sentiments in it, but I imagine for many of the poorest people in the world, it is just a distant dream to be in charge of their own life, of their own decisions.
So yours is a song of a dream to the poor.
2007-10-01 09:53:07 · answer #4 · answered by Sprinkle 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Love it! You're a natural songwriter! Some people can write songs and others can't and you are by FAR one of the people who CAN! I know I can't write songs....You're awesome! I'm imagining what it's like to music now...;D
2007-10-01 09:51:53 · answer #5 · answered by converse_girl91 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's great! Now just get the music with it! Turn it into a rock song!
2007-10-01 09:49:20 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
pretty good.Its better than most others that are put on P/S for our opinion.
keep up the good work.You may have the beginning of a great song writer.
2007-10-01 09:53:14 · answer #7 · answered by § dreamer § 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That's awesome! You're good! I love writing poetry and songs too!
2007-10-01 09:58:49 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Da iawn
2007-10-01 09:49:28 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
DA iawn well done keep writing you will be rich and famous one day I'm sure <<>>
2007-10-01 09:52:03 · answer #10 · answered by kendal 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋