why i cant sleep at night by emilyy!!!
I was laying in my bed
as thoughts of you ran through my head
it was a dark and gloomy night
but i still wouldn't dare turn on the light
i walked over to my window
with my heart feeling heavy and low
i see the full moon
reminding i lost you too soon
the stars where shinning so bright
i wanted to, but smiling didn't feel right
i pushed the hair out of my face
while thinking of the memories i would never erase
i saw the huge tree
had me wishing there was still you and me
i pressed my hand against the glass
remembering how the time had past
i cant sleep at night
because you're gone, and i don't feel right
2007-10-01 09:39:59 · 12 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
i like it love, it's very nice.
2007-10-01 09:43:41 · answer #1 · answered by mauikittie 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's good, I find the flow a little stretched at points, but all around a very expressive piece.
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2007-10-01 16:48:10 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sounds like it was written by a middle schooler. Very dull, lacks literary devices and creativity. Also the rhyme scheme is very elementary school-esque.
2007-10-01 16:45:26 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
wow... it feels like something from a science fiction... as if some weird creature would come in through your window ^_^, it's good... sad but good
2007-10-01 17:03:58 · answer #4 · answered by Paris, je t'aime 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Good
2007-10-01 16:43:19 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
its good How You expressed the feeling
2007-10-01 16:43:42 · answer #6 · answered by tdang424 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's ok.... but i don't feel your pain from the words that you chose. i also don't like poems that rhyme, because i think they detract from the emotion. but don't take this personally, it's just my opinion.
2007-10-01 16:54:07 · answer #7 · answered by Kat 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
WOW, thats a great poem.
2007-10-01 16:45:31 · answer #8 · answered by Erica Epidemic™ 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
continued....
If you need a hug,
I promise to hold you tight.
2007-10-01 16:44:02 · answer #9 · answered by the_chief 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It's mediocre. I think you could do better.
2007-10-01 16:44:17 · answer #10 · answered by golden sephiroth 5 · 2⤊ 1⤋