Am I a good writer? Please tell me!!!?

Question

Okay...PLEASE don't copy this guys. I worked VERY hard to get this tiny bit...so don't be a cheat.

That night Calypso, Goddess of the Sea and Lestat, Prince of Vampires died because of Will, who was left to raise Calypso and Lestat’s twins, Olivia and Tristan. But when the three left The Flying Dutchman, the crew suffered greatly. The Flying Dutchman must have a captain, and it was Tristan’s job to cut out his heart, and become the captain of this damned ship and its members. However, Will refused to let the children stay on the ship…and took them to a small house in Port Royal until one not so special day sixteen years later. Will wanted the two to be what he called “normal” and told them that he was their father, and their mother died during birth.
You see, Olivia was blessed with her mothers’ powers, and controlled the seas…without even knowing it. Tristan on the other hand, was not so fortunate. Tristan was cursed with his fathers’ vampirism and dark, unwanted solitude.

If you want to hear more about it OR hear the rest (there's not that much....i'm just getting started on it) then e-mail me!!!
Thanks!

Answer 1

You have some talent keep working on it.

Answer 2

1. THE RULES DON'T APPLY TO ME. I see this one quite a bit. I think that there are some rules that are okay to break some of the time, but that doesn't mean every rule should be thrown out the door. 2. AGENTS AND EDITORS HAVE IT IN FOR ME. I haven't seen this one a lot, but I have seen it, and it's sad. If you want to be a writer you need to accept that maybe you aren't good enough, and that if you aren't good enough you won't stop trying until you are. 3. I'M NOT A MARKETER, I'M A WRITER! This one I haven't seen, but that's probably because almost everyone I know or have talked to is either published or currently writing. If I knew more people trying to get published, maybe I would see this more. 4. I SHOULD SPEND A LOT OF TIME FANTASIZING OVER WHERE I WILL BE PUBLISHED NOW THAT I'VE WRITTEN TWO CHAPTERS OF MY NOVEL. This is the biggest problem I see in new writers. They are writing to be published. You may be asking, "Wait, isn't every author writing to be published?" The difference is that for authors that will be published, getting published isn't their goal - writing is. Getting published is merely the result of a goal to write. For writers who may not be published (at least until they change how they look at things), getting published is their one and only goal, and because of that they may not even get there. 5. I'M A BETTER WRITER THAN MOST PUBLISHED AUTHORS. I've seen this one quite a bit. Books that are published are typically published for a reason. Thinking you're better than published authors is the first step to becoming unwilling to change and improve, and being unwilling to change and improve is the first step to failing as an author. If there's one I was definitely guilty of is was #4. I focused so much on getting published that if I didn't think my book was publishing material I tossed it out. I didn't even want to write unless I was sure it would be published. I have finally gotten over this delusion, and getting published really isn't my goal anymore. I'm not saying I don't want to be published (I do with all my heart), but if my first completed book isn't good enough, then oh well. At least I gained all that experience, and on to the next project I go. Another I was (and sort of still am) guilty of, at least to a certain degree, is #5. For a long time I wanted my writing to be perfect, and it hurt me so much to think that it wasn't that I denied any faults. I'm still working on overcoming this mindset, and I've come a long way. I'm getting better and better at excepting that my writing needs work, and now I'm finally starting to feel that I have what it takes to never give up. If I'm not good enough, and I'm probably not, then I won't stop until I am. I am going to be an author no matter what it takes, and I'm ready to give it my all :)

Answer 3

I read this and I think Pirates of the Caribbean senario-the cutting out the heart, The Flying Dutchman, Calypso, yada-yada. Lestat is also a copy of Anne Rice's novels. Yada-yada.

Your vocabulary and grammar is amazing. You should expand on YOUR OWN ideas rather than a collaboration of other's ideas. You could have a very prospective career as a writer if you would apply yourself in a different way.

Than again, fan fiction is making major hits on the net.

Answer 4

Well you're in the right direction which is a very good start. I believe that one of the biggest problems that many writers have is that they lose focus of the story and find themselves all over the map. I'm a freelance reporter and sometimes find myself writing stories with loose ends that can leave a reader with many questions upon finishing the story. You mentioned that "the crew suffered greatly," but in what manner did they suffer? What happened to the Flying Dutchman's former captain?

Keep working on it and don't give up.

Answer 5

It is very confusing because you use run on sentences and it is a complete information dump. Bascially you have started by dumping a large amount of character informant. You are telling - not showing. It would be far more effective if you worked some of this information into some dialogue and drama and saved some of it for later on. When a book starts with a huge information dump like this, it is a complete turn off. Hey, you have two people who died because of Will, and yet he is left to raise their children. You would have to do a little more explaining there.

Try writing it over with some dialogue and some drama. Maybe start with the actual death scene. What you have right now is not at all interesting. I wouldn't read the rest. I don't like books that lecture me. Dialogue and drama are what you need. Pax - C

Answer 6

It's very interesting. I would add more detail, like is it a stormy night when they come in? What are the surroundings like? Are they anchored near a city? Or are they near a sandy beach, or rocky clifftops? What do the peple look like? how old are the kids? What are the people wearing? Is the ship made out of metal or wood? Is the ship in good condition? Does it have barnacles and seaweed stuck to it's hull? Details are very impratant. Keep writing though, it sounds wonderful so far! Imagination is a wonderful gift, keep using it. :D

Answer 7

I can tell you've read some Anne Rice... ;)

You seem to have an creative imagination and that is a strength. The technicalities behind your writing could stand to be improved upon but with more practice and development - I believe you have something.

Keep writing and Good luck!

Answer 8

Why would anyone want to copy this? It's not good.
You are trying WAY too hard; you are trying to make it sound pretty with big words, instead of having actual talent shine through. I see though that facade, and it bothers me.
Honest, you could be pretty good, if you cut out that annoying poser writing style and got your own ideas.

Answer 9

Well it sounds good to me perhapps some of the dramatic words could be toned down some ,but I'll give it a 9.
I am a professional comedy writer so I don't do novels so well. I think you might have something.

Answer 10

Constructive criticism: You are starting a story with a death? That makes me not want to read anymore, too sad.

Never use the words but, but because or and to begin a sentence.

Change Will's name to something more romantic or exciting.

remove the ... you don't need it

Answer 11

I read the first sentence and was confused by the structure. You need to do a rewrite or two. I don't really care much about the genre either but that's only my taste.