Okay. Can some great writer out there transform this sentence into a paragraph that a good buisness man would write? you know, professional
"I like working here at dunkin donuts but I would like to transfer to Epping Two (the second location of dunkin donuts...) because it would be easier for me to get there..."
Thanks in advance!!!
2007-09-29 10:56:33 · 7 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
I've enjoyed my (X amount of time) working for Dunkin' Donuts, where I've been able to (list an accomplishment or two here). I'm very interested in transferring to Epping Two, because (here, I would give a reason different than it being just easy to get there - you won't get far with that reason! Compliment them on their business reputation and let them know you'd welcome the opportunity to join their team).
2007-09-29 11:07:21 · answer #1 · answered by Coach E! 4 · 0⤊ 3⤋
I like working here at Dunkin Donuts but I would like to transfer to Epping Two because it would be easier for me to get there by foot. It is very close to my flat.
2007-10-03 17:26:42 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
"I enjoy working here at dunkin donuts, but I would like to respectfully ask for a transfer to Epping Two, simply because it would alleviate the the problems I am experiencing with my current commute."
The others have given you some good sentences, but they just sound to 'suck up' to me. You don't want to come off that way. Lay it on the line. Perhaps someone at Epping Two has the same problem and they will then keep that in mind.
Good Luck!
2007-09-29 20:29:27 · answer #3 · answered by pj m 7 · 1⤊ 3⤋
I enjoy working at Dunkin Donuts, the product, the atmosphere and the company of my workmates, but I am experiencing transport difficulties. I would be very grateful if I could transfer to the Epping Two location so that these difficulties could be resolved.
Hope this helps.
2007-09-29 18:10:58 · answer #4 · answered by SKCave 7 · 0⤊ 3⤋
Respectfully requesting to be transferred to Epping Two Location.
I very much enjoy working here at Dunkin Donuts
However I am requesting this transfer due to the fact that the Epping Two Location is much easier for me to get to from my home Location.
If this can be facilitated, I would be very thankful
Yours truly *blah blahblah*
2007-09-29 18:10:21 · answer #5 · answered by genntri 5 · 0⤊ 3⤋
"I like working here at dunkin donuts"
Could go something like,
“it’s a pleasure working here at DD” or“I’ve always enjoyed being an employee of DD”
But = “Recently however” or “Now I wish”
To transfer to Epping Two (the second location of dunkin donuts...)
because it would be easier for me to get there... = For reasons of convenience
or better yet, I feel I will be more focused at a more suitable location.
Finish with Kind Regards, and sign your name
Good Luck!!!
2007-09-29 18:12:36 · answer #6 · answered by Kris B 2 · 0⤊ 3⤋
There arent many better places to work at than dunkin donuts, but it is hard for me to get to, so I would like it if you would considering letting me transfer to Epping Two.
note to question-writer: I could with more information, or i could write another sentance with this information, if you want me to.
2007-09-29 18:22:38 · answer #7 · answered by Stacie 3 · 0⤊ 3⤋