AP thesis paragraph HELP!!?

Question

So I need a thesis paragraph and I have NO CLUE what to do. I gave him one but he said it's a great thesis statement but not good enought thesis paragraph. >>The English colonists tried to escape harrassment in England for many reasons. The citizens were exhausted by the monarchies abusive ways. The people wanted religious freedom and more economic opprotindy. << Someone PLEASE HELP and thanks in advance.

Answer 1

Here's a good how-to page:
http://jerz.setonhill.edu/writing/academic/thesis.htm

This one seems a bit more complex and detailed:
http://users.drew.edu/rgreenwa/thesis.htm

This one has some evaluative checks built into the explanation:

http://www.sdst.org/shs/library/thesis.html

If this or another answer here proves helpful in your research, you can encourage good answers by choosing one answer as the "best answer."

Cheers,
Bruce

Answer 2

start up off with something elementary that merely gets an over all view like: Freedom of religion, freedom of speech and freedom from the tyranny strategies of the monarchy. those have been the main motives the English colonist tried to flee and seek for areas for a greater useful existence and then end the paragraph with how your going to assist those claims : ] have enjoyable