THIEF
You rip me off most everyday
With yours and mine you make your way
With nothing left I stand in the sun
Then you steal my heart and off you run
Who'll be next on your dreadful plight
Will you take what they have in the day
Or will you rob them at night?
2007-09-26 18:29:30 · 4 answers · asked by rosemary h 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
A tad pedestrian, childish in spots but flows nicely, good imagery though, well done.
2007-09-30 12:19:27 · answer #1 · answered by kissaled 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It appears to be missing a line in the scheme of pattern and rhyme.
2007-09-27 01:34:36 · answer #2 · answered by Princess Picalilly 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love the poem it really makes me think of my man and how he treats me!!!
2007-09-27 02:11:12 · answer #3 · answered by Rellyrell 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
love it but would have worded it by day and by night but im old fasioned and its your poem.short and sweet .well short anyways.
2007-09-27 01:44:29 · answer #4 · answered by narlyknot 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋