Another's Shoes, comments?

Question

Just wrote this online...

"Another's Shoe's"

Dusk to light,
Something lost,
in the night,
Amisdst the purpose,
Left long ago,
Cradled close,
Within a noose.

A bow like a rose,
Shifted, shelved,
Halved in twos.
Glimpse of glitter,
Never knowing whose,
Twisted leather,
You slip into.

Twitching, itching,
Pretense of flight,
Dreams tied tight,
Laces laced,
Unknown pace,
Stretching prayers,
Temptation's quiet.

Hunger fills,
Empty souls,
Sized and prized,
Broken gifts,
You've never lost,
Forced to fit,
Mother's knot's,

Actually, I think I'll call it "Perfect Fit"

Answer 1

Hi,
No, not a ‘perfect fit’. There is something here that is not ideal as you use the words ‘something lost’ ‘noose’ ‘never knowing whose twisted leather’. So it’s not just one person’s shoes you’re stepping into – and surely every pair you try doesn’t fit. Also the leather is twisted which suggests distortion, out-of-shape, distorted. There was a hint of promise, in a glimpse of glitter, stretching prayers, temptation’s quiet but you’re still left with a hunger, a need that’s unfulfilled by the shoes you’ve stepped into now. You tried to force them to fit, tried to delude yourself it was a perfect fit, but it wasn’t! That's the way I read it anyway and the beauty of poetry is it can mean something different to everyone who reads it.
Pollyanna

Answer 2

I liked Polly's interpretation, but I would suggest that it could also be the opposite. Some people are trying to fit into your shoes and can never do that perfectly. It's because you lost half (one shoe?) of the original pair (again Cinderella). Mother's forced fits can be confining, but aren't they necessary for survival? Is Mother doing only what she knows best or a conscious malicious component? (dreams tied tight)

Answer 3

I like this part of the poem the best:

A bow like a rose,
Shifted, shelved,
Halved in twos.
Glimpse of glitter,
Never knowing whose,
Twisted leather,
You slip into.

You've now reminded me I need to work on a new poem of mine.

Thanks ♥

Answer 4

LOL i agree.... they don't think of of that do they! and yet another element they have suggested Kate is a suspect yet what approximately that lady who see a woman matching Madeleine's description in a petroleum station!!!! in her pj's ( i no there grow to be a mistake with yet another woman in the cafe yet sum1 else see her - supposedly

Answer 5

Excellent, Excellent poem, I might say.

Here's my theory on walking in someone elses shoes:

Walk a mile in someone elses shoes, That way you are a mile away from them aaaand you have their shoes.

Answer 6

well written another shoe to me means it's over with your lover and you have a new shoe to wear.

Answer 7

yea...i think the second title is better. another shoe's doesn't really fit.

i'd call it life

Answer 8

Too dark for me. Not my kind of poetry. Each to his own!

Answer 9

As always, lovely!

Answer 10

in my humble opinion, these words are filled with raw imagery, sorrow that breaths beneath the surface, and longing beauty.

thanks for sharing.