Soft, Soothing, Memmories,
Hard, Callous, Reminders,
Whisper Within.
Who holds your heart,
Who holds your whispers,
Trusted with your soul,
All that you know.
Torn, broken, bleeding,
Trusting, Believing, Healing,
Whisper Within.
Dawn sets softly on the moon's broken heart,
As your light sets you apart,
Reflections of yourself,
Embraced by your art.
Caressed by whispers within.
2007-09-26 16:43:28 · 15 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Beautiful!
2007-09-26 16:58:10 · answer #1 · answered by DrMichael 7 · 4⤊ 0⤋
Not bad at all - good imagery. The answer-ers before me gave you some good grammar tips, and good encouragement. Wait for the inspiration to hit you, then grab a tablet, as opposed to the other way 'round. Why stare at a blank page? Advice like "Keep trying" or "Don't give up" will not satisfy a poet. You can only write when the moment grabs you. And it will never grab you on a schedule. One poem this month, then maybe ten will emerge four months from now all in three days. Best advice I can give you, and best that anyone can really. Oh, and read lots and lots of others' poetry!
2016-05-19 21:33:51 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Of course you know how I love imagery & metaphor. There's a wonderful balance in the tender, & the harsh. No "forcing" to rhyme--pure feeling. I especially am drawn to "Whisper Within--Who holds your whispers--Whisper Within," & then the last line that draws softly all the thoughts & feelings together, "Caressed by whispers within." Evocative--yet an over all sense of "gentle." Thank you for sharing.
2007-09-26 17:43:57 · answer #3 · answered by Valac Gypsy 6 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Beautiful.
2007-09-26 19:19:53 · answer #4 · answered by doggie love 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Oh i really like that!!! No complete sentences is a very good way to reach the feeling of that poem. And the right words! I makes me think! I like that. It can mean whatever you want it to mean by relating it to yourself. That's very well done.
2007-09-26 17:34:03 · answer #5 · answered by Fishy!!! 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I like it. The whispers within one's soul have truly been captured by your poem. Keep it up! Very deep.
2007-09-26 16:49:40 · answer #6 · answered by Life Saver728 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Exactly.
For our thoughts and feelings are all our own and in reality we can only comfort ourselves from within.
That was heavy, but great.
If you're writing these poems from your own heart, then I think that you need to find a publisher because you have a gift, my friend.
2007-09-27 04:37:23 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love all your poems, you know that since I'm biased lol.
Was Memmories meant to be spelt like that or was that a typo?
♥
2007-09-26 16:48:34 · answer #8 · answered by ♆Şрhĩņxy - Lost In Time. 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I enjoyed the rhythm and flow of words. Thank you for sharing.
2007-09-26 17:16:19 · answer #9 · answered by Marguerite 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
it depends....some people may be able to relate and this poem will really touch their hearts...while for others they can't relate, therefore take it bluntly and stuipdly
2007-09-27 17:38:08 · answer #10 · answered by ? 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋