Character sketch?

Question

Can anyone read my character sketch.. to see if it's okay..?
I'm starting to think that it is all over the place..
=.=;;

So read.. and opinions?

Laurie is a character of a manipulative demeanor, a mastery of deception, and a character in which undergoes a differentiating individuality change. As an astounding character of five years of age, he possessed a solid grasp of manipulative situations, in which an example lies in his trickery of maintaining a double identity. The complex deception originated on Laurie’s first and foremost day of kindergarten, as described in the context, he was no-longer the angel faced, corduroy adorning Laurie, but rather, a character of juvenile maturity in his parents’ perspective. Nonetheless, he was of an obvious increased intensity of insolence, his raucous shouting, and the consistently developing estranged relationship from his parents. Mentioned faintly in the context, the forthcoming aspects of Laurie’s personality degradation was unapparent to his parents, they in utter oblivion at the drastic change persona, but rather fixated on ‘Charles’, the ever-so-believable, static character.

I'm not done though..
Just wanted to see if I'm on the right track...

Answer 1

I am a retired teacher and I don't mean to be judgemental but it sounds like you cut and pasted stuff together, your language doesn't flow as if it came from you, but ????? email me if you like

Answer 2

What? No classmates or instructor to communicate this with you? a character caricature is a short description of the particular and emotional characteristics of the guy. extra emotional I do have faith in view which you prefer to comprehend how the character is on the interior. or...i need to be incorrect.