Is this sentance gramatically correct? How can it be improved?

Question

By the title alone, we can determine that within the relationship there is uneasiness between power and protection, because of the child-like connotations that the word “Daddy” brings to mind.

I am rewriting my analysis of Sylvia Plath's "Daddy" for AP Lit. This is essentially what needs to be said, but I just need to know how to better form this sentance.

Answer 1

By the title alone, we can determine that within the relationship there is uneasiness between power and protection, because of the child-like connotations that the word “Daddy” brings to mind.

Revision:

The childlike connotation of the title "Daddy" suggests the tension Plath evokes between father as authority and protector.

If this or another answer here proves helpful in your research, you can encourage good answers by choosing one answer as the "best answer."

Cheers,
Bruce

Answer 2

It seems to be kind of a run on sentence. I'm not sure if it is grammatically correct to start the sentence with "By.." either?? Maybe I'm wrong.

How does this sound:
The title alone causes one to conclude that within the relationship there is an uneasiness between power and protection. Primarily because of the child-like connotations that the word “Daddy” brings to mind.

Otherwise, just leave the first part like you have it and make the last part a second sentence.

Wow, that took me a while. I feel bad for anyone having to write a paper right now. Uggh.

Answer 3

By looking at the title only, one can determine there is uneasiness between power and protection within the relationship because of the child-like connotations the word "Daddy" brings to mind.

Answer 4

From the relationship assigned by the book’s title, we can determine that there is uneasiness between power and protectionism that child-like connotations of the word “Daddy” suggests.

Otherwise, break your statement into two sentences so that you do not have a run-on sentence.

Good luck!

Answer 5

I don't see anything that is grammatically incorrect in the sentence other than it seems to be somewhat wordy. One possible rewrite might be:

"In the title, we observe unease in the relationship between power and protection, because of the child-like connotations it evokes."

I don't know if that captures the exact sentiment that you were trying to express, as I have not read that particular work. I may have altered the essence of what you were trying to say. I hope not. Just a suggestion to help avoid a cumbersome sentence. I hope that helps (probably not, but it was worth a shot).

Good luck

Answer 6

The title alone brings up issues of power and protection. "Daddy" as a parental figure could represent authority, but since it is less formal than "father," it implies a close relationship between father and daughter.

(or that the author would have liked it to have been a close relationship....)

I just thought the sentence should have been broken in two, and explained differently, but since it's out of context, maybe you explain later. In that case, ignore me!

Good luck; AP Lit can be tough.

Answer 7

no a million) it is not any longer an entire sentence. 2) it is attempting to make a assessment. for this reason, it needs to have a observe like "greater" or "much less" or some thing alongside those lines in the past "nicely-customary." 3) "For" would not make experience the place it is at. i think of "for pronounced" is meant to be "aforementioned" or "forementioned."

Answer 8

I think that is a very good sentence and i dont think you should word it any other way

Answer 9

you've misspelled sentence. i didn't bother checking the rest.