can someone please refrase this sentence so it is not a fragment and flows smoother?
Sacrifices in stories where the character changed their viewpoint and personality did not work very well, while the ones that did not worked better.
In addition, could I have some synonyms for 'are made?"
THANKS
2007-09-19 12:42:43 · 4 answers · asked by cherrybaby 3 in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
It isn't a fragment as it's written.
The convincing [or maybe you mean effective, within the story] sacrifices were the ones made by characters who retained their attitudes and personalities. When the characters changed their points of view in making their sacrifices, the sacrifices they made were less believable [or failed to produce the desired results].
Made: created, developed, produced, effected, brought about, instigated. Don't overdue the passive voice, either.
2007-09-19 13:05:02 · answer #1 · answered by Goddess of Grammar 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
In stories where the character changed their viewpoint and personality, sacrifices did not tend to work well, while...
Then do the other side the same way, it's hard to get your sentence meaning out of context.
"Are created"
"Are Formed"
? Hope i helped.
2007-09-19 19:52:42 · answer #2 · answered by drddr627 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The characters which changed viewpoints and personalities did not work well, however those that stayed true worked much better
2007-09-19 19:53:42 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Here you go:
"Rephrase my sentence"
2007-09-19 19:51:47 · answer #4 · answered by Aldo the Apache 6 · 1⤊ 1⤋