this is called "The Chasm" and it is exactly how i feel about my "family"?

Question

The past is a vast crack
That swallowed my mother
And spit me back
I looked over the edge of the crater
And I really missed her
Years later, looking back
I can only hate her
Between the need for nurturing
And the yearning to break free
Is a gigantic fault line
That starts with a tremor
And seismically ceases to let us keep to our beliefs
Take these heavy stones of the past off of me

Behavior modification is slavery

The past is a massive tidal wave
That carried my father out to sea
And came crashing down on me...

s.l. nichols
Autumn '06

Answer 1

I like it but you seem to not like your mother were it was my father. Did it gain you anything, for me it was just the pain of losing him.

Answer 2

This is pretty deep and it also clearly reveals the turmoil that you have been feeling a quite some time. Poetry can help soothe some of these deep seeded feelings, resentment and scaring; and in time it maybe something that, with a little intervention (just to talk things out) you can think about and won't leave you so bitter. Keep up the writing. You show talent for putting words together.

Answer 3

Man is successful if he forgets the past, concentrate on present which is a seed to flourish for the future. Any how you have great wisdom and deep thoughts, Bravo Keep it up.