WHEN WILL IT STOP
The world we live in is full of hatred and greed
Not caring about others as long as we succeed
We’re only for ourselves, hey I made it by
For the rest of the world all you have to do is lie
They teach us when were younger to do what you can
But in order for you to do that you must beat every other man
They teach us to steal and how to cheat to get ahead
All around the world all the things are being spread
People being snobby as they pass you on the street
Returning your smile with a frown of bitterness and conceit
They‘re impatient, rude and always on the run
They’re only 14 and already have a gun
They disobey their parents and backtalk people of higher rank
They take things from others and don’t even want to thank
They scream and they fight and threaten to kill
They do what they want and live for the thrill
No matter how much we have all we want is more
When ever something goes wrong all we do is declare war
We never give unless we expect something in return
There’s nothing in the world but money that we yearn
The world we live in is full of hatred and greed
Where everyone thinks that their the higher breed
They cut everyone down to make sure they’re on the top
But tell me please, when will it stop
By: Beverly Hurd ©
2007-09-16 07:27:07 · 12 answers · asked by SO scrumdidlyumptious 4 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
I totally agree with this poem by saying how bad the world is. I don't think it will ever stop, it will probably just get worse. Unless people accept Jesus, the world will still be a horrible place. I am sending this poem to all of my friends, so thank you for this.
2007-09-16 07:32:24 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
I had trouble with the meter.
The content is good for the most part. Stanza 2 seemed a stretch. Who is teaching us to steal and when did "doing what we can" mean that you had to beat everyone? "What we can" doesn't imply we have to be the get down and dirty best.
I also had a bit of trouble with "People on the street" turning suddenly into 14 year olds in the next line and next stanza. I got an image of , well, New Yorkers in the first line then stumbled when they were all 14 with guns and being disobedient.
The fifth stanza had powerful messages in it.
g-day!
2007-09-16 15:04:24 · answer #2 · answered by Kekionga 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i love it!!! heyy can i put it on my , myspace (what is your name i will tell ever one that you wrote and and stuff send it to my friends ) man i cant write a poem so that makes you like wayyy better then me ROCK ON sorry this is a kinda weird answer ....
2007-09-16 14:39:15 · answer #3 · answered by ~Death Angel~ 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think you summed it up quite well. I wonder when will it all stop? Probably when we blow ourselves to oblivion in the name of peace.
2007-09-16 14:33:53 · answer #4 · answered by Sage 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
WOW i am speechless.i just love long and realistic poems.it keeps me busy.i don't think i will EVER make a poem that good!
2007-09-16 15:05:37 · answer #5 · answered by Katyra 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Poignant, brave and too true. Sad I feel. Thank for sharing it.
2007-09-16 14:32:41 · answer #6 · answered by Mele Kai 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I loved your poem as it was really good; and yes you hit this subject right on the nail...Your really a great writer so keep writing ..Thanks for sharing and here;s a star for your honesty and great poem....Shelly
2007-09-16 14:38:17 · answer #7 · answered by Cami lives 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
0.o solid
2007-09-16 14:31:32 · answer #8 · answered by boomboom 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I LOVE IT!!! it is about reality and the world, it is meaningful.
2007-09-16 14:32:24 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
thats meaningful
2007-09-16 14:31:14 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋