MARRIED BLISS?
Your eyes meet across a crowded floor
Your heart's a flutter, there is no more
No other lovers, no other beaus
The room is empty but for his one man show
Your word stands still for there is no other
He becomes your life, your friend and lover.
The life you had, went out, had fun
He's now your life, moon, stars & sun
Without him there your world stands still
For him you'd lie, you'd die, you'd kill
He's now the other half of you
You can't exist, what will you do?
"With this ring", you're duly wed
And then he takes you home to bed
For nights of passion and sated bliss
And warm embraces with a tender kiss
Your life's complete, so real the dream
But is this dream quite what it seems?
Within 6 months, there is no kiss
The warm embrace is now a fist
There are no tender, love-filled nights
Just drink-fuelled rows and violent fights
Once what was a loving hug
Has become a thump from a violent thug!
2007-09-15 22:22:50 · 17 answers · asked by CHRISTINE O 4 in Family & Relationships ➔ Marriage & Divorce
To all that have read and replied, unfortunately, it was my life, and the poem was written after he died. To the person who doesn't think that things like that happen, go to any womens' refuge. Im with someone now who is the complete opposite of my husband. And, to any woman/person out there who is, or has lived that life, get the strength to get out! I wish I had. If I'd known then what I knew 6 months later, no, I wouldn't have married him. That poem was written from the heart!
2007-09-15 22:57:34 · update #1
I Iike it.
A little slow to start, I initially thought it was going to be just a set of rhyming words. As the story evolved and the momentum built up I felt the rhythm and speed. Its emotional and should be in the entrance of a women's refuge. Hopefully you will soon write one about the escape and recovery.
2007-09-15 22:38:37 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Thank you so much for sharing this poem,i do visit places where this has happened and some off the sights are really upsetting,,,,i wish and hope people would read stories about other victims and get enough energy and bravery too walk away,so thank you once again,xxx
godbless
2007-09-16 06:27:18 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i am not a poet nor a philosopher but i mean what i say what i feel ur poem touched my heart and being a women i can understand i wanna tell u to leave tht man who can be tht bad dont loose hope dont loose faith dont break from within
no ones thr to help no one cares u ae thr u r alone u have to fight go and prove tht u r a women
god bless you
i hope and will pray tht u would write a poem again of love and happiness.
2007-09-16 08:17:00 · answer #3 · answered by a b 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
OMG that's impossible. a guy that thumps his wife....she wouldnt have ever known bliss, no moon or such loving bliss...a guy that can hit his woman or show such violence?
that would have shown its ugly face right from the beginning.
so i disagree with your poem's content. tho shocking and has a good flow and rhymes well. but the content is a farce. made up or whoever thinks they are writing truth...is not facing the facts.
2007-09-16 05:43:54 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Ooh, you know I could make that a good song. I like the way the mood changes, right up my street! I could start the music all light and fluffy and end on a total Deftones trip. Mwahaha!!
2007-09-16 05:32:01 · answer #5 · answered by bruvvamoff 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I liked this poem,
why dont you try posting on a poetry website?
try www.poetryshared.com
there a good bunch on there and will give you comments
am on there too
mazblondie
happy writing
2007-09-16 05:31:35 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
A sad but often true account of married life. Not mine and i empathise with anybody who has to live like that.
2007-09-16 05:26:41 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
A very sad peom and well written, well done...sorry to read that it was true, im glad you now have a happy life enjoy it.x
2007-09-16 14:16:22 · answer #8 · answered by slodge29 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its excellent but very sad and I really and truly hope that this is not about you because poets often write about what has happened to them and their inner feelings. If it is you get out and get some help because you dont deserve this. God bless. Big hug.
2007-09-16 05:29:08 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
Cleverly written and makes the reader think.
Now leave the b****** and find a man who won't hit you, you certainly deserve better.
2007-09-16 05:32:23 · answer #10 · answered by MarkEverest 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋