Ok this is a song i made while i had free time tell me what you think of it. Use a beat while you read it also.
Title
My Loving Angel
"Ah, ah, I loved you so much.Ah, ah, what happened to lasting forever?What happened between us?Your loving smile...then your frowning face witch brought so much sorrow!Ah, ah, I'll love you forever! Until I die I'll think of you, and hopefully you do too! My heart will ach for you! My love is forgiving only for you my sweet angel... hopefully your heart ah's for me! Don't cry my angel I hope we see again. The sadness in your heart will be covered in light by my love! I loved you soo much! Why did it end like this? Don't say things like " I don't love you" or "I'll forget what we did with eachother." I know how you feel my sweet angel. I can see the bitter sadness in your eyes. When I come back the sparkles in your eyes will come back too! Then we can last forever! Ah, ah, I loved you so much! Our love is everlasting...but when I think of what happened...The sadness will return once more! My loving angel return to me and lets live forever in harmony!"
2007-09-15 19:54:37 · 5 answers · asked by Blood Lust 2 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Other - Entertainment
It doesn't rhyme, so I expect this would be a very slow and serious song. Run spell check, and try to format your lyrics to see where you're losing meter.
2007-09-15 20:00:08 · answer #1 · answered by Your Uncle Dodge! 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow thats some good Ish!
You wrote that your self,
i need to hear it now on a beat! a nice slow R&B rhythm!
man thats some sweet stuff,
keep the good work up
take care
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2007-09-16 02:57:18 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
You might just really have something here! Get yourself some music and a good voice to sing it and tweak it a little & you could be rich.
2007-09-16 02:57:26 · answer #3 · answered by char__c is a good cooker 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
soppy but nevertheless good.
2007-09-16 02:57:50 · answer #4 · answered by ? 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
ZZZZZZZ Oh, sorry...I was awake...really!
2007-09-16 02:57:01 · answer #5 · answered by doodad 5 · 0⤊ 2⤋