NOTE: This may seem unorthodox as a song lyric or poem but i am hoping to turn it into a cradle of filth/ Nile type of song. An unorthodox style of music.
God knows Who'll overcome the duel,
Between my good and evil Passions,
For warnings of my masters evil ways,
Are followed by consuption of their flesh.
My Half God blessed Heart Tells Me,
To Slay him for man's good,
Yet a wh0re's blood's placed in crystal glass,
Ushers me to his eternal world.
All evil knows that a serpant's kiss,
Is The sweetest kiss alive,
In a regretful world,
Deprived of Sunlight,
Through This Kiss I shall Survive.
A Poor Excuse for A Demon,
A poor excuse for an angel,
Are the sources of pain beyond the mind,
of Good, Evil and creatures truly divine,
I pray for this romance to go astray,
For even love won't part me from my pray.
2007-09-15 14:15:39 · 11 answers · asked by . 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Philosophy
OMFG!!!!!!! dude litarally all you need is a back up band and you would be famous i loved it sooo much!!!!!
2007-09-15 14:19:47 · answer #1 · answered by fiona_wright_12 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very nice but work on how well the poem/song actually flows up on the first stanza because it seems a little choppy.
Other than that I really enjoyed this.
A 9 out of 10.
Bravo.
2007-09-15 14:24:09 · answer #2 · answered by O_o 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's a bit bizarre in it's content but somehow it does seem to have some meaningful texture to it, once you get past the weirded out feel of it.
2007-09-15 14:22:58 · answer #3 · answered by sustasue 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes i like this poem because it is expressing very good view about poor and how to help them
2007-09-15 14:22:07 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
You have a gift for writing songs in my voice it sounded terrific. You are a very good writer i love it alot.
2007-09-18 04:22:57 · answer #5 · answered by I♥JonasBrothers 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It would make a good rock song!!!! A bit weird, but very thoughtful. I like that.
2007-09-15 14:41:02 · answer #6 · answered by Mal777 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That's some pretty intense $hit dude...I like...but other people might find it just a little bit creepy.
2007-09-15 14:32:08 · answer #7 · answered by Tucker 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love it dude. That would make a pretty good song, seriously its that good. :D
2007-09-15 14:23:22 · answer #8 · answered by jscorpion1120 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The Will is positive, the Judgment is negative. if you can't be straight, be crooked.
2007-09-15 14:47:37 · answer #9 · answered by Psyengine 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i read the first line and i got bored. sorry.
:P
2007-09-15 14:20:17 · answer #10 · answered by lizabethbasler 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋