How does this poem make you feel?

Question

Bliss Sapping Life
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Its harder to wake then fall asleep
Naked and blind but no more a sheep
The pain of knowing nothing at all
The shame in believing the things that we saw
Dangerous
Our confidence
Bleeding us
Of Common Sense

We see the way the atoms spin
A pattern seen above again
People try to understand
Holding yet to faith in man
You're speaking words
You do not believe
Reassurance
Non-threatening

Residents of now, like then
The meaning of what seems insane
Slipping through their minds again
Then, accepted as the only way

Instead of keeping open doors
Holding on to you and yours
Grip is solid, safe, and sure.
Anything to be secure

jettif - Thats pretty much the problem presented in the poem, but there really is more to it then that. I don't understand how people can't understand what I'm trying to say here.

Answer 1

I think you've got a great deal of talent that will shine out for many once you master the art of editing a little better and learn to avoid even the slightest cliches.

Of the hundred or so poems I've read in Yahoo this is near the top as one of the better written.

Answer 2

I find you are speaking about something in your life.
Something that is very deep and meaningful to you.
Perhaps even something that may have happened to you or someone else.
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Its harder to wake then fall asleep
Naked and blind but no more a sheep
The pain of knowing nothing at all
The shame in believing the things that we saw
Dangerous
Our confidence
Bleeding us
Of Common Sense

(this part makes me feel like something really bad happened and the end of your poem was sort of like,
hope was what you were looking for, or rescuing. Like a shelter from a haunting past. Or something of a 9/11 experience. *something really chilling*
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Instead of keeping open doors
Holding on to you and yours
Grip is solid, safe, and sure.
Anything to be secure

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I liked the poem very much and I hope that you will come and join other poetry groups on the web.
I'm in writerscafe.org, thestarlitecafe.com and allpoetry.com

in writerscafe: poetic_muses
in starlitecafe: Poetic_muses
in allpoetry.com: stormigrl

Keep your poetry coming, I'd love to see more. I'm intrigued by it. Honestly and that's coming from a Poet who has 6,000 poems on the internet today.

Answer 3

Confused from line 1

Answer 4

I got the impression of mindless drones, hyporcrisy, and following the cultural norms. Am I close?

Answer 5

kinda make me sad then feel un secure =9

Answer 6

Hi yellow... just wanted to say....I rather read romantic poems , you ask ... yoli GBU

Answer 7

confused
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