I have a small paragraph to check .... kindly help me ?

Question

Auto Test Machine enables us to test the resistance and the stress of certain materials. The testing method is to apply accelerated pressure on the upper and lower surface of the material. As the speeding pressure goes high, the piece of the material broke into parts. At this stage, the machine stops pressing and records the value as the maximum tolerance achieved.

Your notes about it all please , and I want u to answer this please :
1 - " Enables us " -- or --- " Enables you "
2 - " the method of testing is TO APPLY " --- or --- " is BY APPLYING "

Very -- (thank you) -- much

How about :

Auto Test Machine tests the resistance and stress of certain materials.

Answer 1

"to apply" or maybe "involves applying"
"breaks into parts" for tense consistency.... "breaks apart" is a more typical expression.

"becomes high" or "At high speeding pressure" I prefer the latter. Actually, "high" is a bit vague. Is there a more quantitative description or some term for this critical point in pressure? These emphasize the highest pressure. "As the speeding pressure rises" would emphasize the change in pressure. I think I like this best.

"the piece of material" would sound less awkward.
maybe "stops pressure acceleration"? Check if other people use "pressing" in this context. It's a bit odd for everyday English, but if other people in your field say it, it's fine.

us/you/third person and present/past tense depend on the purpose of this writing--scientific journal? technical manual? report to the boss? If it is an experiment description for a journal, at least the last two sentences should probably be in past tense, and optionally past tense for the first two sentences. If you are just explaining how equipment works, it can be in present tense. For technical writing, check the standards for your field--I don't want to mess you up there.

"Auto Test Machine tests the resistance and stress of certain materials" is better for scientific writing--more concise. You could use another word like "measures" or "evaluates" if you want to avoid repeating "test" so closely together.

ahaha i got really carried away. boredom, i guess.

Answer 2

Auto Test Machine enables us to test the resistance and the stress of certain materials. The testing method is to apply accelerated pressure on the upper and lower surface of the material. As the speeding pressure goes high, the piece of the material " break " into parts. At this stage, the machine stops pressing and records the value as the maximum tolerance achieved.
Only one mistake...

Answer 3

1. You could write it as "An auto test machine allows ONE to test the resistance and stress of certain materials."--**
2. "The testing method is to apply..."
3. "As the speeding pressure (INCREASES or) goes HIGHER, the material breaks APART (or "into pieces.").


**--the use of ONE doesn't specify any certain person or group of people.

Answer 4

1) Enables us is ok. Enables one is much better.
2) By applying is good.

Answer 5

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Answer 6

the piece of the material WILL BREAK into parts
machine stops THE PRESSURE

us..seems right
in your context to apply looks right

Answer 7

1) Either one
2) "to apply" sounds better
Also, use "breaks" instead of "broke" in order to keep everything in the present tense.

Answer 8

1. either one will do but i would recommend "you"
2 either one but i reccommend "is by applying. "