I stand before a window,
sound of a crackling fire,
changing hues of sunrise.
Peace surrounds me,
my soul is at rest.
Currents of wind,
twist and tortures,
the slow rising mist.
Ramp to Heaven,
in field of lost souls.
Tiers of boiling fog,
pillars holds up the sky,
UFO sitting on a pond.
You see,
what you want to.
2007-09-14 15:25:31 · 7 answers · asked by Coop 366 7 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
I like the change between the concrete at the beginning and the shattered string of images toward the end. The breaking of the last line for impact is dramatic, and it works well. However, the lines:
"Currents of wind,
twist and tortures,"
did you perhaps mean "twist and TORTURE," ? That seems to be able to fit better.
2007-09-14 17:56:49 · answer #1 · answered by HelterSkelter 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Very interesting poem and theme. I like it. The ending was a surprise and thought provoking. It makes me wonder ...
2007-09-15 03:32:40 · answer #2 · answered by Marguerite 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Interesting theme but perhaps better wording, either way, it was good, I liked it.
2007-09-14 23:34:21 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
your obviously writing about your doubt over whether Ezekiel went up in a UFO.
2007-09-14 22:34:49 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 2⤋
not bad a little deep for me
2007-09-14 23:00:53 · answer #5 · answered by Grand pa 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
very good. I like it, and I think it is very well-written.
2007-09-15 01:45:40 · answer #6 · answered by J.L. — Dominus Sapiens 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
noice very noice
2007-09-15 04:37:10 · answer #7 · answered by likeminded 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋