Summer fades to fall
Blaze orange sauce and noodles
Beefaroni rules
2007-09-13 03:37:56 · 5 answers · asked by Bill 6 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Hi Bill,
You know, most of the times I open a post like this and am disappointed by the newbie attempt at haiku. But this one really worked for me. It made me laugh and I enjoyed it. I rarely see a haiku that does that for me, and I've seen far too many. The first line is a bit on the nose, but the next two are the real "meat" of it anyway. Good work! Keep it up!
Done well!
2007-09-13 03:47:09 · answer #1 · answered by Dancing Bee 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
that's the best haiku I've heard in weeks... the only one, but still the best.
2007-09-13 03:45:37 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's actually QUITE good.
Follows both the meter and the abstractness of Haiku.
I like it!
2007-09-13 03:47:22 · answer #3 · answered by Scotty Doesnt Know 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very nice.
2007-09-13 04:04:15 · answer #4 · answered by Samurai Jack 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Love it :)
2007-09-13 04:25:58 · answer #5 · answered by inbetweendays 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋