"Nobody" cares?

Question

We are best friends,
An inseparable pair
Two peas in a pod,
That's what we are.

But what happened now?
Everything seems lost
It's like you're someone else,
Someone I don't know.

Do you even remember me?
To you, I'm now gone.
A stranger, an outcast,
A nobody, is what you think of me.

I tried so hard
To bring back the times,
The times we had together,
But i guess you've changed.

I can't do anything
To change you back.
I have no rights,
Who am I anyway?

Forget me, I'll bear it.
Hate me, I'll accept it.
But I just want you to know
That "nobody" cares for you.


what do you think

Answer 1

I wrote one too.

For A Friend Like You


I realize that it has been a while
Since I've seen your kind of smile
A friend that is there, and one who really cares
I realize that I might be missed.

But despite, all of the hard times
You've been a wonder on my mind.
I'll keep sending you some wishes
Hoping that we'll meet again, sometime

But, at least until that time,
I can write you, hoping that you don't mind.
I think it's best when I admit the truth,
That I'd do almost anything for a friend like you!

Your going to read/hear this, yet when you do
I think it's wonderful, how we can pull through
I'll be here when you want me, I will be here for some help
Even if your lonely, and when you are by yourself

If you want someone to talk to. I'll give you all my best.
I'll give you some of my advice, and I'm willing to risk the distance.
No matter what the feeling, I'll help you with the dealing
....And depending on the cost, I'll let you know when I'm at a loss.

I still think it's best when I admit the truth,
That I'd do almost anything for a friend like you!

Answer 2

Very good. The first stanza would work if you used the past tense: were instead of are.
Sometimes you want him to know in the hope that it may bring him back. Most of the time, you are the only one with that much forgiveness. You have to let go of the yearning to hold onto the love, without pain. C. :)!!

Answer 3

Hi Nobody,
Just thought I'd let you know that I like it. Since getting on here, I am getting a little more accustomed to free verse, and you did well keeping it in a readable rhythm. I like the way you knew the 'nobody' line in. It reminded me of an old c&w song "Your nobody called today". Have fun and keep on writin'.

Answer 4

I like it.

Sometimes it takes us some time to get adjusted to a free verse because we just sort of expect poems to rhyme, but this it took no time for me to adjust to reading. I liked it a lot, and you presented it very well with the choice of words, and the flow.

Also, something that caught my attention was the nobody... i love how you used nobody to describe yourself, and what she or he thinks about you... very nice touch.

Answer 5

i care through fact im purely that style of guy or woman, i care through fact in case you're positioned in this earth you're between the fortunate ones so stay your existence to the completed and remember one element and that's just to care even a sprint !

Answer 6

I think you have called yourself "nobody" It is a good poem. Life is about change, it is very hard to accept

Answer 7

THIS IS A DOPE A$$ POEM!! I REALLY LIKE IT. IT KINDA HIT HOME...I FELT THE SAME WAY A WHILE BACK..I GOT A POEM SOMETHING LIKE THIS

Answer 8

Great free verse. good as it is. good simple language. not too complex. not too simple. good meaning. and good wordplay. i think it would make a very good song.

Answer 9

It good but a little brutal, don't you think

Answer 10

I like your poem.