It's been lingering there for about a year or so. Big somedays not so big the others. At first i thought it was because i sleep on my fist sometimes in that area and that caused the bruise. Sinus's... allergies? i dunno.
2007-09-12 10:31:53 · 2 answers · asked by ChuckF 2 in Health ➔ General Health Care ➔ Other - General Health Care
Any bruise that does not resolve within two weeks warrants medical attention! Please see a doctor as soon as possible to be sure that this is a bruise and not a medical condition.
2007-09-14 13:26:07 · answer #1 · answered by ilse72 7 · 4⤊ 0⤋
I think it is well written and it kept me hooked until the end. The opening paragraph was a little rough to me. Try to make your sentences flow more. Also, you switch your tenses sometimes. You need to go back through it and fix any little mistakes: grammar, punctuation, tenses, etc. It's the little things that matter! I don't really know what your story is about, but I can sort of tell that it might just be more then the average girl gets bullied. The average bully is a coward and wouldn't say or even try to kill someone. And I liked the part of this Kami girl being noted as "the devil". I think you should word it differently so the reader knows she's not actually the devil, but reminds the main character of the devil. Also, add more descriptions so we know exactly how the fire feels, what the character is thinking and feeling at the moment when she is being choked, and so on. I liked it, and if it fits in your story, then keep it!
2016-05-18 00:19:07 · answer #2 · answered by ? 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋