(I finished this last night. Already I've been told it's 'cute.' But is it something more than cute? It's a little too long to fit into the alloted space here so please wait until I add the rest of the poem in 'Details'.)
Twinkle, Twinkle Crying Star
If
each elephant envisions
erroneous epithets,
while wombats wander worldwide
wordlessly wondering why,
mongooses maintain mostly
morose mouthy monologues,
and aardvarks act aimlessly
avoiding all affection -
If
poor pious possums ponder
plaintive, painful platitudes,
confused, caustic cattle can't
compose cud coherently,
wounded woodpeckers worry
without wiggly, witless worms,
cautious, crying crocodiles
cannot contemplate chaos -
If
reptiles reject regression,
eagles equate erosion,
dolphins detest dire dogma,
camels cringe collectively,
bears bare begrudging burdens,
tortoises try to tunnel,
owls oust outlandish options,
horses have hemorrhages,
And
skunks smell sudden suicide -
(Cont.)
2007-09-11 06:19:53 · 6 answers · asked by Doc Watson 7 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
If
domesticated doggies
dig diligently deeper,
foreseeing falcons flying
forever forward from fear -
And
coy cockroaches can't complain -
Wouldn't it be safe to say
that God's more evolved creatures
know what we refuse to know,
show what we refuse to show,
see what we refuse to see,
hear what we refuse to hear,
fear what we refuse to fear?
2007-09-11 06:21:40 · update #1
Fantastic interpretation of natures observance and mans ignorance to world change.
2007-09-11 06:47:49 · answer #1 · answered by bailingwirewillfixit 3 · 2⤊ 1⤋
This is so much more than cute. This has so much meaning behind it, and I can feel it in every word, and each alliterated phrase. This is amazing... I don't even know how to put it into words, but you obviously do. I loved it beyond all belief... It's incredible!
2007-09-11 13:49:00 · answer #2 · answered by SoMissUnderstood2 3 · 2⤊ 1⤋
That person who called it cute obviously didn't read it properly and take the full message in about man's cruelty towards the animal race.
2007-09-11 20:36:50 · answer #3 · answered by ♆Şрhĩņxy - Lost In Time. 7 · 2⤊ 1⤋
kool....u get a happy gold star from me
2007-09-13 20:09:43 · answer #4 · answered by Xiana 3 · 2⤊ 0⤋
loved it have a wee star hehe
2007-09-11 13:42:09 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 1⤋
outstanding....we want more.....good luck
2007-09-11 13:27:52 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 1⤋