I love this idea and its expression.Its really very good keep it up. I hope u will send moore.Good luck
2007-09-11 04:47:32
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answered by Dua 1
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i really like this poem, considering u were only 14 when u wrote it. Judging by the amount of poems uve written i can sense you are passionate about poetry and your writing reflects this. You display much talent... id give you 6 or 7 out of 10. however, just as some advice... the last stanza is a little out of the norm.... maybe you could split it into 2 quatrains. i liked the idea but when reading the last couple of lines, the words dont flow. But bravo ;)
2007-09-11 04:36:51
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answered by Sardines 2
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It RoCkEd hon, but, you need to go back through it (as I need to do my own) and revise as it lost some rythem here and there, I loved the topic however "clich" it may be, forever, poets will be rewording everything LOL
Kepp it up sw33ty and if you need to holler I'm at ahshadowrai@yahoo.com
I'd love to see more of your works kk?
All the Very Best, Shad @)~>~
2007-09-11 05:38:40
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answered by ? 3
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The first two stanza's were awesome :)
Last one didn't have as much pow cause it didn't rhyme, but hey, overall, i'll give it a 7/10 :)
I'd love to read more, message me if you wanna send some for me to read.
2007-09-11 04:31:49
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answered by Suki 4
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I love this poem,
and i know just how you felt,
I'm in love with this cowboy,
and don't know if he'll always be there.
I know he cares for me,
I know he thinks of me daily,
but he wont say i love you,
and to be honest,
I'm a little confused to.
~Country Girl~
2007-09-11 07:18:00
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answered by redneck_countrygal_27 2
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do not be too plain, grab some sense of feeling and metaphorically say:
You are a mirage
blah blah blah
do not use a simile in this analogy. metaphor states your thoughts and feelings more succinctly
2007-09-11 05:50:14
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answered by ari-pup 7
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That is awsome. Would love to see more.
Keep up the good work
2007-09-11 04:33:54
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answered by suzie 7
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that is really good i would like to see more
2007-09-11 07:23:17
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answered by rach 3
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i like it....i have a poem with the similar idea
2007-09-11 04:34:15
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answered by You Are My Wings So I Can Fly 4
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Excellent no matter HOW old you were when you wrote it!
2007-09-11 04:46:25
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answered by AKA FrogButt 7
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