Want To Read A Modern Nursery Rhyme For Grownups?

Question

TWINKLE, TWINKLE CRYING STAR

If
eight elephants envision
erroneous epithets,
while wombats wander worldwide
wordlessly wondering why,
mongooses maintain mostly
morose monthly monologues,
and aged aardvarks aimlessly
avoid any affection -

If
poor pious possums ponder
plaintive, painful platitudes,
confused, caustic cattle can’t
compose cud coherently,
wounded woodpeckers worry
without wiggly, witless worms,
cautious, crying crocodiles
cannot contemplate chaos -

If
reptiles reject regression,
eagles equate erosion,
dolphins detest dire dogma,
camels cringe collectively -

And
tortoises try to tunnel:

If
domesticated doggies
dig diligently deeper,
foreseeing falcons flying
forever forward from fear -

And
coy cockroaches can’t complain:

Wouldn’t it be safe to say
that God’s more evolved creatures
see what we refuse to see,
hear what we refuse to hear,
fear what we refuse to fear?

(Yes, I wrote this mindless drivel!)

And it's just a rough draft that will have revisions. Like these:

bears bare begrudging burdens,
tortoises try to tunnel,
owls oust outlandish options,
horses have hemorrhages,

And
skunks smell sudden suicide -

I’m pretty sure it’s quite acceptable to personify animals in a satiric work of literature. The novel ‘Animal Farm’ has managed to find it’s way into print and into virtually every school library. I don’t think too many people have faulted the ghost of George Orwell for writing such a fantasy.

Answer 1

That's a very good tongue twister.

Answer 2

That's quite a work you've got there. The premise is unsound though. You're personifying those creatures with human feelings/emotions which they cannot contain. While its a cleaver little aside - I doubt it will make the textbooks.

Thanks for the grin. Keep writing.

Answer 3

I thought it was fun to read. I enjoyed it.