Thesis Statement? 10 pts.!?

Question

How can I make my thesis clear in this introduction?

Today, we live in a society where we are free to choose whomever we want to marry, unlike in the short story, “The Needle”, by Isaac Bashevis Singer. -------->It must therefore be true that people themselves are just as qualified as matchmakers are; both can thread relationships with a needle, that is, the key to love. <--------When creating a successful marriage, one must always have a keen eye and a sharp end like a needle. If one can accord to such a discovery, why trouble someone else to do the same? To go about finding your Romeo or Juliet in the right way, all you need is to be guided by pure intent, while going about it the wrong way can lead to disastrous results, and finally, never amuse oneself that you have truly understood the magic behind true love.

thanks.

Answer 1

This is not as much help as you were hoping for, I imagine but as an unbiased reader, your thesis statement has a great beginning. "It must therefore be true" is a great set-up. But after that I have no idea what you are trying to prove. It needs to be more clear and more concise. I hope that helps. Good luck to you.

Answer 2

Not to be a downer, but this makes entirely no sense. Perhaps you mean "stitch together" instead of "thread" relationships?

Why must one have a keen eye and a sharp end for success in marriage?

Without having read this story, I would venture to guess that the needle refers to the matchmaker. The reason a needle was used as comparison was probably more due to what a needle DOES (stitch things together) rather than referring to what a needle IS.

Hope this helps your understanding. The whole concept needs a rewrite.

Answer 3

Start first with the statement of the problem.

Then state previous efforts done to resolve the problem.

Tell why previous efforts have not been effective.

Then state your proposed solution to the problem.

Then explain or elaborate on the methods you will use to come up with your proposed solution.

Describe as you apply the solution.

Then state your conclusion after applying your solution to the problem.

It always helps to be methodical. Always begin with an outline. You don't have to be detailed about anything at all. For a thesis introduction, a short summary will do. State your points simply and clearly. No need to be wordy and spectacular. You will have all the chance for words while you write the body of the thesis.

Answer 4

You asked how. HERE'S HOW, EXACTLY. Consider that fact that you have only one main point to make in your paper. Also consider that your entire paper is an argument, and your one main point is the conclusion of your argument. What is it? What is the conclusion of your argument? Answer that, and it IS YOUR THESIS statement. Put it at the beginning of your paper. Also, put it at the end of your paper. State it so that NOBODY with average intelligence and who speaks English can misunderstand it. Everything else in your paper should prove your conclusion. If something does not work toward that end, take it out of your paper.

Remember, your argument's conclusion is your thesis statement. THROW OUT THE TERM THESIS STATEMENT. IT SIMPLY IS THE CONCLUSION OF YOUR ARGUMENT. You state it right up front, so that people know the point for which you will argue in the rest of your paper up unitl you REPEAT the conclusion in the section of your paper called the conclusion.

See, students get confused over the terminology about arguments, and the terminology about papers. Papers have thesis statements, introductions, bodies, conclusions. Arguments have premises and conclusions. Your thesis statement is none other than your argument's conclusion!

Bear that in mind, and write a knockout paper!

Trust me on this one. I used to mentor academic performance tutors at an Ivy level university. When people realized that a thesis statement is nothing more or less than their argument's conclusion, they aced the thesis statement parts of their papers.

Why English instructors continue to confuse students with their ambiguous "thesis statement" terminology, I do not know.

Oh also, if you are worried over whether somebody wi8l know which sentence in your paper's intro is the conclusion for which you will argue in the body of the paper, make it clear! Say something like, "My position in this paper is....." and then make sure you say it precisely and with no ambiguities. How much more clear can it get than that?

Answer 5

Its a run on sentence. Re be conscious it as... In Harper Lee's novel, To Kill a Mockingbird, Scouts curious, wised and helpful character leads her to disagree with the racism occuring in Maycomb County.

Answer 6

The Will is positive, the Judgment is negative. Is 'pure intent' of the Will, of the Judgment or both. Anti religion is a religion, anti ideology is an idea but anti racism is not a racism. Is anti racism sound enough to produce a consistent product for individuality, or is something more needed for your certainty, for your ideal. I think if a person is able to interpret Socrates and Erickson, you have a good candidate.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Socrates

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Erick_Erickson


oh yes, and this manuscript of Karl Marx: http://www.marxists.org/archive/marx/works/1844/manuscripts/comm.htm

Answer 7

I agree that we all are probably equipped enough to choose our own mates but the key, to me at least, is to also have the ability to be honest with ones self. I made that mistake about twenty-seven years ago. I listened to every one else but my own heart. Thread the needle if you must but do it with a thread from your heart.