I wrote it, and want feedback from someone before I give it to him.
I feel better when I'm with you
Forget about all that I've been through
And with my hand in yours
My future doesn't seem so cursed
I'm lying awake at night
Wishing you were holding me tight
Right now you're only a day away
There are so many things I wish I could say
But the words lie on the tip of my tongue
I'm not really sure what's wrong
Maybe it's that I'm just scared
That if I say them, you'll no longer be there
Maybe I don't want to be alone
Maybe your arms just feel so much like home
Maybe things simply aren't what they seem
Maybe I'm living on wishes and dreams
2007-09-07 22:22:48 · 10 answers · asked by mandy 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Sounds like true love to me. That's alright with me! Good job girl. I wish my girl would write me something sweet. I give it a 10 out of 10 real talk. And I don't even like poems but this one, i can feel.
2007-09-07 22:30:06 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
I really like the poem. I can tell that it was written with real emotion. Yet i also can tell that words came from the heart. There is no better poem that that of one written from the heart.
2007-09-09 13:51:33 · answer #2 · answered by aacoomes19 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think you did a great job!
however, you might want to prepare yourself for rejection just in case he doesn't understand why you wrote this. i'm not trying to be negative, just that you put in a lot of thought and heart to it and the last thing you need is rejection.
good luck!
2007-09-08 05:35:41 · answer #3 · answered by we-well 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
WOW, one of the best love poems I've ever read, favorite. xD. Hey can I use this for my literature class anthology thing? Don't worry am not gonna credit myself for it, tell me how you want me to credit you please, or just tell me if you don't want to let me use it. If no reply, I'll just use ur yahoo answers username k?
2007-09-08 05:43:22 · answer #4 · answered by lynxmcromance 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
really good!many compliments!bye!my id is kiarat8@yahoo.it if you want to chat with me!bye!
2007-09-08 05:36:01 · answer #5 · answered by chiara t 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
i think the message is really good...very expressive...very emotional. I like it.
2007-09-08 05:28:45 · answer #6 · answered by ♥Slide♥ 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I liked your poem its good.
2007-09-08 05:46:07 · answer #7 · answered by Rama Krishna 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
and with my hand in yours ....to.....seem so cursed .this part shud hav bin better.it s nice
2007-09-08 05:29:38 · answer #8 · answered by stargirl 13 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
you wrote it for him, give it to him, if he doesn'y love it, he's crazy.
2007-09-11 19:26:49 · answer #9 · answered by Dondi 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
bland, boring,inane unryhming,shite!!!
2007-09-08 05:28:53 · answer #10 · answered by marcus m 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋