I am 24 years old, and have never written a poem before. I am seeing a therapist, and I was told it might be a fun idea to write my feelings down.I've always liked poetry, and would like to run this by you.
Thank you!!!
2007-09-07 22:03:31 · 15 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
My soul bleeds for your touch
crimson drops of pain splash upon the ground with every heartbeat
I am empty... without life, and without your love
I still remember the taste of your lips: each kiss we shared
salty yet passionate and sincere
as if you always knew how much it meant to me
to be loved by you forever
2007-09-07 22:03:56 · update #1
I know it doesn't rhyme, but this is about my feelings, and like emotions, there is no rhyme, no logic to how I feel.
2007-09-07 22:12:30 · update #2
yes we understand you...that's called lyric poetry.
kinda disturbing though...too intense emotions...but it's good.
2007-09-07 22:33:32 · answer #1 · answered by ♥Slide♥ 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's horrible! It's awful! I've never read anything worse! HA HA HA! JUST KIDDING. It's actually pretty good. I'm impressed, especially since this is your first time. You should write more. By the way, what are in therapy for?
2007-09-08 08:47:08 · answer #2 · answered by leslie k 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
First poem? not all poems rhyme youo know, writting is a great way of getting to grips with ourselves, I think any way. It often helps the process of emotoinal stuff, even the nice stuff too. I think you should do another and another and another.................very moving I thought it was smashing
2007-09-08 05:28:18 · answer #3 · answered by finn mchuil 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Salty lips? interesting. Overall it was pretty good. Poetry doesn't have to rhyme. Keep expressing yourself man..
2007-09-08 05:14:34 · answer #4 · answered by trevino283 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hey you got the tallent.
I write poetry when life is tough.
It is a very healthy way to get your feelings out.
If you can't figure out a line, come back to it later.
I SAY BRAVO.
2007-09-08 05:13:39 · answer #5 · answered by clcalifornia 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Quite good for a first attempt, but haha ur 24 of course. Good luck!
2007-09-08 05:13:42 · answer #6 · answered by lynxmcromance 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I really like it. Very nice. I usually like poems that rhyme but I really like yours.
2007-09-08 05:14:24 · answer #7 · answered by Requesting Rita 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's amazing feelings that you got and this appears in this poem but it would have been better if it rhymes
2007-09-08 09:27:24 · answer #8 · answered by saksoka 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its pretty good..but seems kinda cliche.
but dont worry, that's much better than most poems an average person can come up with.
2007-09-08 05:12:33 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's not that bad. I like it better when it rymes. Good luck Homer.
2007-09-08 05:10:49 · answer #10 · answered by Luís Santos 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋