I have no name and have not seen
but. the places I have been
Thoughts of you and why you are
a mystery, a hidden sin
Another time and place perhaps,
a face to face to see that laugh
a smile I’ve carried in my mind
could I be warm, my distant half?
I could be wrong, I could be right
delightful wonder in minds eye
always wishing it could be
sadly come to and deny
A peaceful time I cherish much
although, knowing it’s a crush
someday, if not real I will see
the day when we just simply touch...
2007-09-06 22:55:44 · 8 answers · asked by ? 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
This is very good. I like the way it unfolds in steps. I can't find anything I disagree with. Nice work.
2007-09-07 01:37:03 · answer #1 · answered by TD Euwaite? 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
If you go into poetry..com you can enter that great poem and it will get published in a poetry book.I just did this a few months back.Plus you have a great shot at winning a few prizes for it.What have you got to lose.Nothing!!It is a great poem and keep up the good work!!
Kitty Kitty
2007-09-07 06:05:39 · answer #2 · answered by kittykitty 2 · 1⤊ 1⤋
You are famous
Todd agrees with you
and so do I
I like how the emotions
are in here
happiness, smile
some sadness and deny
along with the love.
2007-09-07 13:56:44 · answer #3 · answered by sweet_blue 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Very Nice piece, almost makes me wish I wrote it. Thanx for sharing.
2007-09-07 09:59:28 · answer #4 · answered by Dondi 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Aww thats a really beautiful love song it really kept me intrigued as do most of your poems you ought to dedicate it to your husband/ bf whoever. Its really fantastic.
Keep Writting!
2007-09-08 00:49:38 · answer #5 · answered by Sh00ting_St@r! 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Shad,
This was a pleasant read with a nice rhythm to it. I enjoyed it.
Best,
Todd
2007-09-07 08:47:13 · answer #6 · answered by Todd 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Very good, I like the way it just kind of Rolls out of your mouth, its very well written, BRAVO
2007-09-07 06:24:46 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
"a hidden sin"
I like that since my nextdoor neighbor is exactly that!
2007-09-07 12:24:18 · answer #8 · answered by ari-pup 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋