Twenty Years from now?

Question

“Twenty years from now you will be more disappointed by the things you didn't do than by the ones you did do. So throw off the bowlines. Sail away from the safe harbor. Catch the trade winds in your sails. Explore. Dream. Discover.” Mark Twain
There once was a girl who’s always played it safe, never cross the line, never step out side of the box. She had many fears and obstacles but they were mostly in her head. Many prevented her from doing the things she’s always wanted to do. One day she woke up and realized that life is short. She realized that in one minute, she can be taken out of this world, just like that. So before she leaves, she vowed to go where the grass is greener and where the rainbow reaches the end. Because twenty years from now, she doesn’t want to be disappointed by the things she didn’t do than the ones she did do. So she will throw off the bowlines. She will sail away from the safe harbor. She will catch the trade winds in her sails. She will explore,dream&discover

Answer 1

quite philosophical,quite true to life.

Answer 2

It's not a poem. It sounds like a graduation speech.

Also, it's mostly cliche: "played it safe," "cross the line," "step out side of the box," "just like that," "where the grass is greener...," etc.

"One day she woke up and realized that life is short." How many times has that been said? And why can't I have one of those miracle moments where I wake up and realize things?
She needs more of a reason for her realization.

The sentence "Because twenty years from now, she doesn't want to be disappointed by the things she didn't do than the ones she did do" is awkward and confusing.

I know the point of the writing is to show that this person learned to stop "playing it safe," but the writing itself plays it safe. Mark Twain said it better.

Answer 3

Very influential message.....i'm gonna let live now :)