While sitting on a plain flying from back to LA from Texas on Labor Day?
I used to write poetry, some of which has been published, but that was years ago. And it tended to deal with complex images and word usage, wiith current events and irony, injustice and moral issues. This silly little poem is simplistic by those standards and hardly profound. But I thought some of you might enjoy it.
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Roadmap To The Soul
A thousand miles
from the ones I love;
two thousand miles
from one who loves me ----
Too late we learn
that distance measured
by steps is not
nearly as far
as the distance
measured by our heart.
(It's okay to pick on this little poem if you want. I'm out of practise writing poetry anyway and am slowly becomming a romantic old cogger.)
2007-09-05 05:23:15 · 8 answers · asked by Doc Watson 7 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Miss Madame, I did not give you a thumbs down. Nor do I ever bother to give anyone a thumbs down. And I am aware that I used the wrong term for plane but caught it only after I had posted the question and you can't edit your own question.
As to the poem itself, quotes seldom, if ever, include personal, reflective thoughts that apply only to the writer (i.e. 'A thousand miles from the ones I love ... etc.). I will grant you that the second short verse could stand on it's own as a quote but, taken as a whole, this poem makes no pretense to be anything but what it is: a simple little poem written almost as an afterthought while returning on a flight.
2007-09-05 07:55:37 · update #1
One romantic old cogger to another:
So practice already.
I've been a hopeless romantic since I was 10. Now I am 61.
2007-09-05 06:02:19 · answer #1 · answered by Dondi 7 · 2⤊ 1⤋
It is a bit simple and reminds me more of a quote to be honest.
Btw it is plane and not plain.
;p
Piss of thumb-downing troll, I'd like to see you try and write a masterpiece which I don't think you could do since you're only true talent is pissing people off!
2007-09-05 07:07:49 · answer #2 · answered by ♆Şрhĩņxy - Lost In Time. 7 · 0⤊ 2⤋
It looks like a sturdy start up, yet unfinished. i've got confidence like i decide for greater intensity interior the stanzas going forward. attempt utilizing imagery and signify what you experience. i wish the thoughts at the back of this poem decide for themselves, too. :(
2016-10-10 00:17:02 · answer #3 · answered by dermio 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it is simple...but I love it.
I too am out of practice in writing. But I really did like this one!
2007-09-05 05:46:37 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
I think its good
2007-09-05 05:32:21 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
this is so good!! it has a very good meaning... :)
2007-09-05 05:35:38 · answer #6 · answered by HAZ87 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
short and sweet... to the point....
2007-09-05 06:00:51 · answer #7 · answered by doclakewrite 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
I THINK ITS REALLY GOOD.
2007-09-05 13:24:31 · answer #8 · answered by donielle 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋