ok i wrote my essay what do you think?......
the person who i thought influenced me more than any famous person and who i idolize is my cousin kelly,her confidence and determination is what really inspire me,she says what she feels and does not care what anybody thinks of her, she knows what she wants in life and will nmot stop until she gets it. kelly is extremely hilarious, sometimes i find myself acting and talking just like her and cant wait until i can see her again. i just wish i could be more like her.
does it sound too stalkerish or childish???do i have wrong punctuation,i seem to have a prob with that.
2007-09-04 13:26:18 · 10 answers · asked by molly 1 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Celebrities
The 'cape crusader', Mr. Bruce Wayne aka Batman.
2007-09-04 13:32:37 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
When writing an essay, the first things you should have are a clearly defined introduction paragraph (who is your idol and a brief reason why), exposition section (more details on the person and why she is your idol), and then a conclusion paragraph.
The punctuation is not bad, but the big things are 1. when referring to yourself, "I" is always capitalized, 2. proper names (like Kelly) are capitalized, 3. contractions usually use an apostrophe (can't).
2007-09-04 20:33:06 · answer #2 · answered by Blue Jean 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
If I was your teacher I would give you a C-. The whole point of an idol is not to "become like them," but rather find some good qualities about them that can help shape "you" into a better person. Work on your sentence structure and punctuation placement.
2007-09-04 20:29:42 · answer #3 · answered by sleepy 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Be Your self. That is the true road to happiness, not trying to
become someone else. I don't idolize anyone. I adore my
daughter and family and friends. I however, don't want to be
any of them. I am me and I am who I was meant to be. I am
happy with that.
2007-09-04 20:38:58 · answer #4 · answered by Bethany 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's OK but sounds like you wanna be like her so much. My idol is Alexis Bledel.
2007-09-05 07:49:29 · answer #5 · answered by , 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
my idol is Daniel Radcliffe and Shia Labeouf
2007-09-04 20:34:32 · answer #6 · answered by Gaby T 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
my idols are the jonas brothers because they care a lot for their fans and they have a lot of faith in what they do....they also believe in god and dont swear in any of their songs! i think it takes real talent to not swear in their songs unlike all of 50 cent and MCR's songs.....i also just love their music and they are all sweet, they also do a lot for charity:-)
2007-09-04 20:30:58 · answer #7 · answered by Jaanie baaby (: 5 · 2⤊ 1⤋
umm well it kinda starts creepy when u say u talk like her and act like her.
u should just be yourself.
2007-09-04 20:33:35 · answer #8 · answered by confusedchick 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
My kids are my idols..they are my everything!
2007-09-04 20:29:43 · answer #9 · answered by I love my angels 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
ed gein is my idol
2007-09-04 20:52:13 · answer #10 · answered by King Corn 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋