♥♥♥We are supposed to come up with this poem for Bible class. I want to know what you think of it♥♥♥
♥♦♥It's last minute so.......♥♦♥
2007-09-04 10:42:19 · 18 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
YIKES! I forgot to post the poem! Here you go.☺
Creatures of the Earth
From the deer on the ground
To the birds in the sky
Each creature is made with God’s special eye
From the slow moving turtle
To the cheetah of fast pace
Each creature has its own special place
From the waddling penguin
To the graceful gazelle
God had made each creature very well
From the busy ant
To the buzzing bee
God made each creature for you and for me
2007-09-04 10:45:34 · update #1
sorry luis c.
2007-09-04 10:47:36 · update #2
Sairah: Um i go to a Christian school. I don't think I can right that.
2007-09-04 11:00:01 · update #3
oops write. lol
2007-09-04 11:00:38 · update #4
Thanks Chaotic Kimy.☺
2007-09-04 11:02:05 · update #5
I love the poem, but you need to work on the way the words flow. If you don't mind, I'd like to make a few suggestions on what you can do to achieve this.
From the deer on the ground
To the birds in the sky
Each creature is made [[in]] God’s special eye
From the slow moving turtle
To the cheetah [[so fast]]
[[God designed them carefully
As if they were glass]]
From the waddling penguin
To the graceful gazelle
God [[has]] made each creature [[]]well----> ((Remove "very"))
From the busy ant
To the buzzing bee
God [[created each one
Just as he created you and me]]
This changes the flow of the poem, plus a few lines that just didn't sound right, while keeping the poem basically the same. I hope this helps.
2007-09-04 10:59:09 · answer #1 · answered by ChaoticKimmy 3 · 2⤊ 0⤋
For me a poem has to have rhythm. It doesn't necessarily have to rhyme but it needs to hit my emotions. I think clarity of expression is important as well. I don't like to second guess what I'm reading about. I always look for what I term "poetic gems"in the text.
2016-04-03 03:39:42 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Bravo Doll.
2007-09-04 10:46:37 · answer #3 · answered by Madam Naka 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I SAY WELL DONE, YOU HAVE A GIFT, I COULD NOT THINK FOR THE LIFE OF ME SWEET WORDS LIKE THAT, ID SAY U WILL COME TOP IN THAT POAM...
HONEST IS IS GOOD,,,,, CAN I HAVE THE 10POINTS PLZ,
YOU ARE A POET AND DIDNT KNOW IT,,,,LOL
2007-09-04 10:50:21 · answer #4 · answered by versace_girl_2002 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is beautiful. You are very sensitive and talented. Here is a star for you!
2007-09-04 10:49:24 · answer #5 · answered by John Timothy 5 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Wow, it's really great! You're going to get an A
2007-09-04 10:45:06 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
Very beautiful but i would change the god to Allah, because Allah is one, and God could have a gender. as in Godess is female and God is male. Allah is an almighty bieng of light.
2007-09-04 10:46:54 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 2⤋
Very nice.
2007-09-04 10:45:20 · answer #8 · answered by Galahad 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
very nice and like the av
2007-09-04 10:45:14 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Very nice, I love it.
2007-09-04 10:47:06 · answer #10 · answered by Blue-♥-Berry 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋