What letter grade would you give this poem and why?

Question

Courage is in everyone,
It's deep inside of us,
Courage is acting tough and strong,
Not succuming to fears,

Courage is releasing your fears,
Whatever they may be,
It's when you push them all away,
To help those whom you love,

Courage is when you don't know why,
But still do what you're told,
If you give your trust to others,
Your courage is like gold,

You will know that you have courage,
When you stay put and fight,
You know the dangers of this war,
And strike with all your might,

Nobody is ever too weak,
Or too small or too young,
Courage is inside all of us,
Shown boldly or unsung,

So now ask yourself these questions,
Will you use your courage,
Or will you give up your hope?
Will you just run away,
Or will you stand there opposed?

Well do you think it's creative?
It's funny how the first person thinks the non-rhyming is bad, while the second person loves it XP

What might you suggest?

Okay first off...Well third off -.-
I tried REALLY hard to make it NOT RHYME
-.-
And poems don't have to rhyme....

Answer 1

I would probably give this a B. What I would need to see from you to get an A is imagery. You have told me a lot about courage, but I would like you to show me concrete images that represent courage (and not predictable one's either--but personal interesting one's).

When you just tell with your poetry it comes off as preachy and doesn't work on enough levels (trust me I've done this myself in the past--I wouldn't give myself an A for those either).

Also ideas like the one below is too superficial. You can write better than this--in my mind you are coasting a bit--I can tell by your structure you can do better than this:

Courage is acting tough and strong,
Not succumbing to fears,

I know this is a basic example and not intended to be good writing--just an illustration:

Bob is courageous.

Bob swims through a school of piranha to save a child.

One tells us. One shows us. I feel that you are telling us that Bob is courageous. Show me some piranha.

Hey and I'm not trying to be harsh at all, I just think you can do better (based on what I've seen here).

Take care

Answer 2

If I had to give you a letter grade, it would probably get a B. The reason for this is a fact already mentioned, that some stanza had rhyming on the 2nd and 4th lines and some didn't. That fact makes it a little confusing to the reader. The rhythm jumped around a little, but to your credit, not a lot. And lastly all the stanzas had 4 lines except the last which had 5. Those 3 things I would have to count off for. But in all, it was better than most I've seen here, so be proud of what you have done. My comments are made in hopes you improve, not to tear down your effort. I tell many that mistakes are the foundation of perfection, so get perfect and let me see more of that type effort. I'll try to be around to let you know what I see, and I'm sure there will be others also.

Answer 3

poems don't have to rhyme, but if you are going to go for a non-rhyming scheme, stick to it. Don't have the first three not rhyme and then the next three rhyme.

Work on your rhythm. When you say the lines, they should each have close to the same amount of syllables and take the same amount of time to say so that the lines line up.

poems in general are hard to grade, because it's not really a story where you would judge sentence structure and grammar and creativity. In general, when there was an assignment where you had to write a poem (unless it is a special class about it), you got the grade for completing the assignment to the right specifications.

Answer 4

I dunno...a B or a C probably. First, it goes off track in the style...like in the first two "verses", the lines 2 and 4 don't rhyme with the last words but they do in all of the others. Also, some of the things are repetitive and sound akward.

It's pretty good though and it contains good thought.

Answer 5

Eh, a "B"

you have not established a steady rhyme scheme. You need it to flow together. Like, abab abac, etc.

Also, you should never ever put punctuation after every line. It is very distracting and not the proper way to write your poem. Just put a comma after every line where you feel there should be a pause.

Answer 6

B-. It was a very good poem, but I didn't like the fact that some of the paragraphs didn't rhyme.

Answer 7

A++


Very good. I liked that some of the paragraphs didnt rhyme

Answer 8

i say a B
i like the meaning of it.. and how you're saying that courage is in all of us!
just a little suggestion
instead of just writing straight forward-ly
try taking a detour, it might lead you to a very unexpected road :)

Answer 9

It envokes a variety of ideas and that i like it. observe decision replaced desirable right into a sprint legnthy and awkward in path of the taking off up yet you introduced it returned properly, in my opinion. although, i ought to've somewhat been examining it incorrect. ;) i like it the two way :)

Answer 10

topic is a very good one and your choice of words is good as well id give u a B+