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I wrote this poem, about a guy I used to have a crush on, but he became a total jerk, so I wrote a poem:

I thought he was the one for me,
The one who’d always be there,
But I guess the feeling inside of me
Knows that he doesn’t care.

He makes me laugh every single day,
But he never seems to notice,
The little girl staring back his way,
With the biggest little grimace.

But then one day, he changed very fast,
Something I was not ready for,
I wish that this would all just pass,
But as I go on, there is even more.

He says bad words, just to be cool,
But I don’t seem to get it,
He is acting like a total fool,
I am sure he has lost it.

I was certain he was the one for me,
But now I can see he isn‘t,
I’ve got a future ahead of me,
And he is not in it.

He has turned into a psychopath,
This insane little jerk,
I had the best times with him in math,
But I guess that was just a perk.

That's not it, I didn't have room, I will post it in the details!

2007-09-03 12:56:20 · 4 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities Poetry

He has his eyes set on another girl,
She’s practically man-bait,
My thoughts are beginning to unfurl,
But I fear it’s too little, too late.

In a year he will be gone forever,
I will never see him again,
Trying to forget is quite an endeavor,
Hopefully he will have matured by then.

There, that is the whole poem. I am not sure how good it is. My friends like it, but I don't know if they are telling the truth.

2007-09-03 12:57:02 · update #1

4 answers

That's a really cool poem. I like how you didn't start bashing him right in the beginning, it makes it more sad, because when something like this happens, and this has happened to almost everybody, it's really depressing. I really like the word choices. I hope you get over this guy, and I wish you the best. Keep writing, I think you're very talented.

2007-09-03 13:07:23 · answer #1 · answered by nowree 3 · 1 0

Hes a jerk to have left someone who writes like you.

2007-09-03 16:45:40 · answer #2 · answered by cynic 4 · 2 0

It obviously came from your heart and although it may not be world class poetry it is very touching. You seem to be a lovely, level headed young lady.

I like it.

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2007-09-03 13:03:53 · answer #3 · answered by Jacob W 7 · 3 0

a good attempt, but the words are lacking in style, or at least variety.
maybe a B+. no lower than that.

2007-09-03 13:05:18 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0 1

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