Contact
My fingers are the contact beteen you and me;
Caressing your fingers through the mysterious web
Of silicon circuits, electronic nerve fibers,
Beckoning to me through a vast won'drous universe.
Your fingers, caressing mine, as they press out my passion
Onto small white keys, playing the melody of contact
Stroking your conscious thought from my desire to yours.
Heaven in the middle, God surrounding;
A concourse of angels, silent sentinels, stand observing
Approving? Not disparaging: my motives are pure.
Seeking understanding and encouragement
From a simple smile which slides through fingers trembling,
Asking nothing but awareness, reaching out through the darkness,
Touching your fingers, bringing the joy immmeasurable,
Wrapping around my soul, and you smile
And I smile.
2007-09-03 04:48:03 · 9 answers · asked by Gma Joan 4 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Finally, someone who really understands how to write non-rhyming poetry with rhythm and flow, with a cadence to add to the enjoyment of reading. I also like the subject of your poetry, the electronic computer world through which you communicate with the world, speaking, crying and smiling through your fingertips. Please don't ever stop doing it right.
A star from me.
2007-09-03 07:55:24 · answer #1 · answered by Dondi 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That was brilliant. I rarely hear or read free-verse poetry that has a good feel, a good picture, a good flow... I'm impressed, actually, 'n that's not easy to do.
I really did love this poem. Brilliant work.
2007-09-04 17:27:08 · answer #2 · answered by Twili 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow! Your poem sounds great. I think it's created very well. And your topic also matches with the poem. I think you have the skill of creating good poems.
2007-09-03 11:55:20 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
That is a GREAT poem! You should enter it in a contest or something. That is just so awesome. There is nothing you need to change.
2007-09-03 11:57:51 · answer #4 · answered by equineabi 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very nice! Keep up the great work! Yours is the 2nd nice poem I read today.
2007-09-03 12:59:40 · answer #5 · answered by CRONKERS 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow. You're talented man.
Awesome stuff.
2007-09-06 07:40:02 · answer #6 · answered by sooth-sayer 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I really like it. very abstract but real...sounds almost as if you were playing the piano in the first part :)
2007-09-06 09:32:03 · answer #7 · answered by MockingBird 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
pretty good. not amateurish at all. one of the best I've read on this forum.
2007-09-03 11:56:48 · answer #8 · answered by Squirrley Temple 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
interesting
2007-09-03 16:38:45 · answer #9 · answered by You Are My Wings So I Can Fly 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋