I don't have a title yet.
It gave us unexplainable knowledge,
The tinnniest of fruit that bore all burden,
But no more,
Now we must hold it, carry it,
With patience and care,
Ignorance is bliss,
And so blissful we are not,
The mightiest of creatures,
Yet we have decieved ourselves,
Thoughts fill our heads, questions,
The knowledge that was gainned is lost with time,
And time is lost with fear,
Fear that we're wrong,
Fear that we're right,
Fear that it's over,
Fear that it's just begun.
2007-09-02 16:31:23 · 9 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
WOW! That is great. Can I as how old you are. I have read books with many poems. This tops many.
2007-09-02 16:39:04 · answer #1 · answered by Efrain T 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love the linkage you have provided in your poem. Lost with time and time with fear. Very effective communication of your message. The little hint of confusion and the right rational thinking, yet dwelling back to fear. Philosophical indeed. Good job, and keep writing! :)
2007-09-03 01:34:52 · answer #2 · answered by UnspokenShadow 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very good. Don't let anyone tell you any different either! If this is something that you love to do, then by all means continue.
2007-09-02 23:42:58 · answer #3 · answered by BabyDoll Mom 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
quite philosophical piece, just a couple misspellings such as decieved and gainned.
good luck
2007-09-03 00:56:02 · answer #4 · answered by ari-pup 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
ur sis went to sleep after hearing this?can't believe tat coz this is truly a gr8 creation!
2007-09-03 07:44:59 · answer #5 · answered by aditi 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You go girl!
2007-09-03 01:35:22 · answer #6 · answered by schooler 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
nice.. i'm trying to write poems..(i have to..for tomorrow)..and insparation doesn't seem to strike)
2007-09-02 23:52:10 · answer #7 · answered by I'm insane 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love it.
2007-09-03 00:08:24 · answer #8 · answered by ? 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
ITS AMAZING, seriously...this is no lie. job well done!
2007-09-03 01:21:07 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋