i will add the rest on other questions so look at my pro*copyrighted*
"What is love?" I whispered to myself in the safety of my own room. "Oh please Alex...you have no idea." I yelled at myself in the mirror. I'm your average 13-year-old girl whose life is a mess. Middle school sucks and I'm a nobody on the social level. Plus, the guy I like has no idea that I exist. I'm not skinny and I'm not fat...nor am I pretty or ugly. I'm an average looking girl with straight brown hair and foggy green eyes. I have the greatest friends in the world, and I'd be nothing without them. I stared into the mirror, looking at myself hard, and long. Here we go, another great day of school...yeah I wish. I grabbed the first t-shirt I could find and a pair of old faded jeans. I threw my hair back in to my usual messy bun on the top of my head. Then I smeared my lips with watermelon crush, and put in a pair of huge hoop earrings. I was ready for another dramatic day of middle school.
2007-09-02 04:57:45 · 7 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
Dear - your copyright means little - in fact it means nothing. I can tell you five ways I can beat the copyright. For one, I could backdate my computer, burn a disk and my copyright date would be before yours. Suddenly YOU would be the plagiarist.
And any copyright is only as strong as the high priced lawyer you hire to protect it. You wasted your money copyrighting the minute you posted online. It can be stolen dozens of times by people all over the world and you will never ever know about it. Besides, if you intend to try and publish, publishers and agents consider copyrighted material to be unprofessional and amateur. It shows you don't trust them. The best thing you can do is find yourself a live writers group where you can get to know people before you share work. You just gave your work to potentially hundreds of strangers to do with as they wish. I publish not a word online. Nor do any other serious authors. What is your purpose for posting here? To get accolades from a jury of your peers who know about as much about writing as you do? That may be great for your ego, but very bad for you as an author. Pax - C
2007-09-02 08:52:09 · answer #1 · answered by Persiphone_Hellecat 7 · 1⤊ 2⤋
Why is this girl your main character? What makes her special? So far, nothing. I am not attached to her. In fact, I dislike her already. It's not well written... Show, don't tell. You tell the entire time: "I'm not skinny and I'm not fat. nor am I pretty or ugly." You should be showing the reader that, through the way she interacts with others.
Also, so far, it seems very cookie cutter... I would not read past this point if I picked up this book in a book store/library.
2007-09-02 07:32:44 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Sounds just like your average 13-year-old girl. For those that say the description isn't good...well, this is written in first person, and the story definitely agrees with what any middle-schooler would be saying about herself.
What should happen next? Keep writing about her on her way to school, introduce her friends, and then let something terribly embarassing happen with her and her crush...ha.
2007-09-02 16:47:24 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
personally I think you start too many sentences with " I.." It might not even be needed if its going to be from that point of view. And it seems to start off like any book, where the main character makes something of themselves and stops being a nobody. Maybe she'll save the world or do something different today. Just my guess.
2007-09-03 12:29:34 · answer #4 · answered by Turboqueen 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I would read more, I like this girl. She reminds me of a million other girls that age. At 13 I am wondering what kind of love she is wondering about, like crush love or real love. I am guessing that this is just a bit of the story your creating. I am going to see your others since I want to see what else this girl sees.
2007-09-02 08:20:45 · answer #5 · answered by princess61470 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is like copying another's person's book. like you are stringing everything together. bad. wrie something that you havee never thought off.
2007-09-02 20:56:07 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
LOL~ I Like it. It sounds like me :)
Peace out
Good Luck
2007-09-02 10:47:38 · answer #7 · answered by I♥pix 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋