"Move On"
That first step, that day
onto the smooth stoned beach
with my two friends
was a sheer stop of joy.
As I slipped my shoes off
- to able myself to feel the smooth stones
of the beach ith my feet,
only I knew exactly why I my heart was filled with
happyness and content.
I then sat down in a triangle with them,
we giggled and laughed while I shared my feelings,
they knew also, exactly how I felt,
I had unlocked a whole new world.
After a short time,
I wish I had never been happy that day,
I wish I could go back.
But, life is too short to have regrets,
cos at the time, it was worth it.
By Drew
Please be nice about it, it is my first attempt!
2007-09-01 17:54:34 · 3 answers · asked by Drew :] 4 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
It's not supposed to make any sense to you, and if it does... THUMBS UP! But it's supposed to make you wonder why I was happy, and what I was talking about...
2007-09-01 18:16:27 · update #1
The poem doesn't make sense.
2007-09-01 18:14:16 · answer #1 · answered by DeborahDel 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I personally think if you want people to wonder why you are happy in the context of the poem that you should title the poem "Why Am I Happy?" (or something else that leads the reader to wonder as he/she reads the poem.) Poems, generally speaking, are not meant to challenge the reader AS MUCH as they are, generally speaking, intended to communicate something artistically.
2007-09-05 11:32:24 · answer #2 · answered by margot 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'm guessing English isn't your mother tongue.
2007-09-02 02:02:50 · answer #3 · answered by abe_crenshaw 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋