btw......this isnt actually a letter im givin to my crush...its just a doodle poem........its just a title series
When i fell,, i fell hard
on the floor, on the tar
i feel for you
this is tru
i think im in love with you
Your smile makes me wanna faint
your gorgeous eyes stare is hard to break
if you look at me, you'll see
how i look back at you
my heart is tru
i miss u.
kinda corny i kno lol
critique?
2007-09-01 16:04:07 · 5 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Do you have something against spelling words correctly?
2007-09-01 17:40:35 · answer #1 · answered by DeborahDel 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I forgot my call - lots lots hate on blood on the dance floor only for there seem and there message approximately Sexual issues. i think of there ok. they have a good message that there sending out to all of us. i'm now going to get a crew of dislikes. the 1st ingredient that is composed of my suggestions is my call. Jesse
2016-12-12 15:42:52 · answer #2 · answered by carcieri 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
yahoo gives you tons of space to ask questions and post comments.Why do you need to make part 1 2 and 3?
2007-09-01 16:13:09 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes corny but short.
2007-09-01 17:43:01 · answer #4 · answered by Duncan w ™ ® 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Get rid of "tar" cuz frankly it made me laugh. It doesn't make any sense. And get rid of "eyes". If he's staring...well we all kind of figure its with his eyes.
2007-09-01 16:10:29 · answer #5 · answered by Bug Fuggy 5 · 2⤊ 0⤋