what do you guys think about this monologue?

Question

Do you really want to know why I’m in a place like this? Of course you don’t, you’re just trying to do your job. (sighs) I wanted a place to escape to from the torment of people and their criticisms. I tried the first drug ever offered to me, and the instant I drew in the breath, I knew I had found my escape. The feelings were nothing like the world I grew up to know, and I loved it. I was instantly addicted and I didn’t feel any guilt at all. For the first time in my life I was happy!(smiling sadly) Is it so wrong for me to be happy that I’m stuck in a place like this, talking to another person who doesn’t care?

I wrote this monologue, just to see if i was any good at it.

Answer 1

It seems a little disconnected. Also there isn't any conflict in it at all. It doesn't have any levels.
Be careful of monologues that are not from actual shows. They are almost always shallow and the character isn't sympathetic enough to be interesting.
There are some great monologue sites if you need one.

Answer 2

You should never write an original monologue, you should always act a character from a movie or a play.

Answer 3

Makes me want to hear/see the whole play!