"Always Alone", comments welcome?

Question

You sing
To yourself,
When no one’s there
To sing to you;
Cry,
To yourself,
When no one’s there,
To hold you;
But you never,
Get lonely,
Because you’re
Always alone,
And no one,
Understands,
What it’s like,
To be you.

Answer 1

YES, some of us are Masters of The Seventh Solitude. It takes recognition and return to face Being on your own. .... INDEED, no one knows what it's like to be a transdimensional wannabee.

Answer 2

The last four lines are a universal truth, aren't they? This is the way I read the poem. Nor do I feel "alone" is in the literal, or mundane sense. I won't make assumptions about whether or not this is subjective--because the inner self is always alone. The implication is certainly there in the first eight lines, but don't you prefer the reader to relate to it in their unique way?
The depth of oneself is always a "lone" spirit, I believe. That's what it means to me. Thanks for sharing.

Edit: angel baby & opercats--did you READ: "But you never get lonely?" To relate in a unique way is qjuite different than projecting, don't you think?

Edit: Dondi>Dear me. No value to "free verse?" Perhaps you prefer rhyme, which is an indication of the amateur. This was a beautifully written poem, & "puffing" gives no credibility. I am a published poet (WOW!) & your critism was not only incorrect, it was rude.

Answer 3

Great poem. You could turn it into a song if you made it a bit longer. Yeah, I get lonely...our daughter doesn't live with us, my husband sleeps during the day because he has very bad insomnia [he even charted on the calendar once that he didn't sleep for 10 days in a row - by the end of that time, he was hallucinating]. My 20 year old son, is a night owl. He sleeps most of the day....and so I am all alone, [except for being with all our pets], during the day...then I get on yahoo answers from around midnight till about 4 in the morning...but my son usually
stays in his room on his most advanded computer in the world
while I'm on my cheap clunk of a computer in the living room... sometimes I actually interact with my son and play ''You bet Your A s s'' a new game show that's on t.v. Then I take a powerful sleeping pill and sleep till about 1:00 in the afternoon...

Answer 4

Nice, a little depressing, and, though I am sure the last six lines are supposed to be a reference to a specific individual (even yourself, perhaps), it actually has the air of a universally applicable truth, as most people feel that no one else understands them, and that they are alone (especially in our culture...)

Answer 5

You sing to yourself when no one's there to sing to you.
Cry to yourself when no one's there to hold you.
But, you never get lonely, because you are always alone,
And no one understands what it's like to be you.

Please explain to me how chopping this nicely written prose into short disjointed lines and adding unrequired punctuation makes this a poem. I have been reading poetry for about 55 years, and have been writing it for 51, and no one, not even the poetry teachers I had in school could tell me that. The only reason I ever came up with was that since they couldn't tell me what makes it poetry, it must not be poetry. Personally I can't see any value in 'free verse' except to give validity to people who otherwise wouldn't have any. If you're going to write free verse, then just write an essay, and be done with it.



OOOOOOOPPPPPSSSSS!!!!!!
there went my 10 points!

Answer 6

Wow... thats a sad poem, but a good one none the less

Answer 7

This one drive the spike home. You have an excellent feel for rhyme and meter. Very nice.

Answer 8

The poem is very emotional and dear to you. I can feel this. Therefore, it is a successful poem.

Answer 9

that's so sad but i really like the poem. Is this type of poem called a waltz wave? luv it :)

Answer 10

Sad but lovely.