MY LAIR
My lair is so precious to me
I sit here in my lair everything is right
The candelabras shine so bright
The carpet is black as night
The walls are blood red
No light enters here, I worry not
It is perfect for my kind
There is a breeze just for me
It is night and time to hunt
But I wish not to leave my spot
I wait for my lord "Donavon" he comes for me
He shows me the way to survive out of my lair
I finally find a way to leave my lair
2007-08-31 02:49:16 · 5 answers · asked by rose_vampiress 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
I wrote this when I was 13.
2007-09-02 17:57:05 · update #1
Your poem is good. It's a bit dark in some lines. But I think it's the style you like. I like the line where you say ' the breeze just for me'. I think you can improve your wirtting skill in poetry.
2007-08-31 04:57:06 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i really liked this i could picture a werewolf or somthign like that. I am not teacher but i enjoyed it i like the tone of it abit on the scary side and i know that is what sells things that you know not much about and its wonderment and stuff i liked it very much take care.
2007-09-07 21:12:41 · answer #2 · answered by Tsunami 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'm OK with everything except the cool breeze. Are there vents in your coffin?
2007-08-31 09:54:59 · answer #3 · answered by TD Euwaite? 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
not bad...kinda deep..it ended to soon...keep trying..beam me up boris
2007-09-01 01:04:31 · answer #4 · answered by eb_guy 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Argh, no more, please.
2007-09-05 11:19:55 · answer #5 · answered by margot 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋