Caged in a world of bitterness...
Self inflickted wounds within
No peace of mind, no self controll
No way to ever win
Mass confusion in the air
With endless streams of faces
Meaningless voids in empty shells
Passing but leaving no traces
Deadlines, delays, dilemma all around
Ya gotta know dooms day
Gonna come and shut you down
Another day, another dollar, another dirty deed
It's amazing what some people do
For something they don't need
2007-08-27 15:22:35 · 5 answers · asked by vitraux 6 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Perhaps, despair or sad resolution would be a better description than pain? Good poem. Thank you for sharing.
2007-08-27 19:55:55 · answer #1 · answered by Marguerite 7 · 1⤊ 2⤋
You remember that, "Over dramatic..." part I said in my answer? That was it... A bunch of rambling nonsense. No direction, I can't really say if it has flow or not. No real, steady picture in my head. Just nothing to it. No feeling, even.
A bunch of random words thrown together out of... What? Can't be feeling... Can't be thought... You just didn't like what I had to say to your happy-go-lucky, cheerful, sunshine poem.
2007-08-27 23:32:14 · answer #2 · answered by Twili 6 · 1⤊ 1⤋
I once walked avenues of twisted thorns w/rain
I somehow found myself out of the woods
now with only fleeting memories of yesterdays pain
2007-08-27 22:35:46 · answer #3 · answered by deirdrefaith 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I missed sappy. Pain is good, very good.
2007-08-27 23:28:13 · answer #4 · answered by TD Euwaite? 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Not as good as sappy, but not bad.
2007-08-27 22:34:33 · answer #5 · answered by Dondi 7 · 1⤊ 1⤋