Sometimes we go throughout our lives
And never have a clue
Of how to find true happiness
To find a love that's true
We look in different places
We open every door
But every time we end up
In a place we've been before
Each soul must search an endless path
Each heart must find it's way
With scars and tears through countless years
A price that's hard to pay
Sometimes we stay togather
Sometimes we drift apart
And sometimes life just throws a curve
Before we ever start
I don't have all the answers
Don't even have a clue
But if I have to start somewhere
I'll start by loving you..
2007-08-27 14:32:43 · 8 answers · asked by vitraux 6 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
I see it's been called sappy,
A little cheesy too.
I saw one said it was cliche,
Just what is one to do?
I guess a poet in the rough,
Like diamonds in the raw,
Do little for the hearts of those,
Who needs so much to thaw.
The words I read were written well,
The rhymes were in there too.
All I can say to other folks,
It all was wrote by you.
I enjoyed it. Great job. Thanks
2007-08-27 15:31:53 · answer #1 · answered by Dondi 7 · 6⤊ 0⤋
This was OK, it was kinda cheesy and very "Cliche", This almost seemed like something I would find inside one of those Hallmark cards..but keep writing, the more you do, the more your heart will open up and bring out all the good stuff, I find this is more possible when either half drunk(not fully) this will only produce pure ****, or "lit"
2007-08-27 14:42:20 · answer #2 · answered by leah j 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Kinda sappy... 'n I've never been a fan of sappy. So my word should mean a lot when I say, It was good... Not brilliant, but I don't think I'll ever say that about something sappy. (Or over dramatic... Like some of the other poems you can find by amateur's.)
Luck.
2007-08-27 14:48:30 · answer #3 · answered by Twili 6 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Wow, that is simply amazing, i love it. You definatly have a great gift, (and a very lucky girl who you wrote this for)
Keep writing!~
:]
2007-08-27 15:10:55 · answer #4 · answered by little.miss.hot.lips 6 · 2⤊ 0⤋
It grabs at my ankles, trying to claw its way out of the gutter...
2007-08-27 16:33:15 · answer #5 · answered by TD Euwaite? 6 · 0⤊ 2⤋
Great.
2007-08-27 15:25:39 · answer #6 · answered by Ronnie 5 · 2⤊ 1⤋
Very nice...do you look anything like your avatar???
2007-08-27 14:40:52 · answer #7 · answered by nada 3 · 1⤊ 2⤋
wow that is beautiful... I want you in my pocket... he he he
2007-08-27 14:44:08 · answer #8 · answered by Chelle B 2 · 3⤊ 1⤋