I wrote something for nia long ,Please tell me what you think.?

Question

From Danovis m. Pooler jr:

To Nia Long


Ever since i was 17 years old i always wanted meet you since i saw you in the movie Made in America
I feel that threw God's eye's and mine you are so beautiful. I guess we are born in different times ( 8 years apart)
but if everything was the other way around I will come to you with beautiful roses and congratulate
you on career as wonderful actress and i will ask you for an autograph and a picture with you
if don't mine,But God has bless you in beautiful ways and i wish i could still meet you but if
i can't in this life,Then maybe in God's Kingdom (Heaven).

Threw God peace be upon you Nia Long and your whole family.

Stay Beautiful my Queen.

Ok my bad

i will fix everything

Answer 1

that is.. honestly a little stalkerish, kinda creepy. and the grammar and spelling need a lot of help, if you hadn't noticed the errors.

Answer 2

Well first off I don't believe this a poem persay. But then again that's not really here for me to say.

Second I think it's cute. You can really feel the admiration from this person. It doesn't seem thearting in anyway so I guess that's why I like it. The kind where I feel we should be together you don't know what you are missing or I think of you all the time. Nice overall though.

Answer 3

Danovis, here's the thing...when you write a poem in tribute to someone, famous or not, you must understand that it needs to be about them, and perhaps, how you feel about them, but it's never a personal letter to them. What you've written is called "prose", not poetry. It isn't poetry because it reads exactly like it would if you'd simply written a letter...which is what it is, isn't it?

It's clear you admire her, but you also need to respect the fact that she is not "your" anything. "You" may be "her" fan, but she does not belong to you. This is why other responders have said your letter reads like that of a stalker, because these types of people really believe "they" are what is best for their victim, that their victim is "theirs", they just don't realize it yet. Your courtesy and grace shows that you are a good person, just be aware of how you sound to others, because it matters, especially in poetry.

try writing some poety about something else and see how you do.

Answer 4

Sounds like one of those letters they turn over incase the person is a stalker. You shouldn't mention her dying in a letter... no matter how good your intentions are.

Answer 5

Hmmmmm, could be titled "letter from a stalker" but is definitely not poetry. Try something else.